User:Leinaala03/Mad Girl's Love Song/Hmf58 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Leinaala03


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Leinaala03/Mad_Girl%27s_Love_Song?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Mad Girl's Love Song

Evaluate the drafted changes
This was a super cool draft! I really enjoyed reading/learning about Sylvia Plath. For my peer review, I’ll section out changes I think would be great in an organized list form. Here it is:

LEAD:

This lead is pretty solid. I like that it’s condensed and gives specific examples/information. Awesome! However, I have a few ideas that I think will allow you to expand and also give the rest of the article a clear framework. To begin, I think some background context/information could really add to this lead. What was the time period like? This might give us a clear idea of how the public received the poem without giving an opinionated explanation or stance. My final piece of advice for the lead is to make sure that everything that you want in the body of the article should be referenced in some way in the lead. You could definitely draw on your “inspirations” section for example. Let me know if that makes sense! Otherwise I think this is really strong.

THEMES AND SYMBOLISM / CONSCIOUSNESS AND MADNESS:

I am SUPER interested and impressed by these sections. However, I’m a little worried that you’re teetering on the edge of an opinionated analysis rather than sticking to a more formal/fact based article. While I think these sections have really strong aspects, I would continue with being aware that addressing certain themes can come across as interpretive. For example, the part about religion/mental state doesn’t seem to be backed up by a source, but I could be wrong. It’s super cool and well written though so I want to see if there’s a way to keep it in or change the wording etc.

INSPIRATIONS:

This is a SUPER cool idea for a section. I ACTUALLY LOVE IT. I wouldn’t have thought of this so this is super cool to see. I think this is a great way to add to the article as long as your examples are backed up by facts you’ve gathered from other sources (which, right now, seems to be the case). I think this section is a great example of balancing factual info with analysis.

REFERENCES:

In general like I said before, make sure everything can be backed up! Which I think you are doing beautifully.

AWESOME WORK!!!