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Who Can Be Affected
Children

Over the years child sex trafficking has increased rapidly. There is an estimation of up to 300,000 children at risk for child exploitation through Sex Trafficking. Most of those estimated victims will be between the ages of 12-14 years old which is the same time most victims enter the sex trafficking trade. It has been seen that children from the ages of 1-18 years old can also be affected. Of those numbers, young women and girls make up 80 percent of the child sex trafficked victims inside of the United States. 25 percent of all child sex tourists around the world are United States Citizens. Children involved in sex trafficking can be used for jobs like working in hotels, in a house as a servant, on farms and even in war as children soldiers. These children can be exploited and traded into places all over the world due to trickery with a promise of schooling and a better life. OESE warns people to look for the signs of sex trafficked victims in their daily lives. Some recommended sources for child sex trafficking prevention are ECPAT, International Justice Mission, World Vision and so many more.

Women

Sex Trafficking involving women has been an issue on the rise for centuries. However, sex trafficking of women was not addressed as a political issue until the early 1900s. Women make up 80 percent of the total number of sex trafficked victims in the world. Within the United States we can see up to 50,000 girls being traded into the United States each year. Women involved in Sex Trafficking are often forced to be prostitutes and slaves. Often, traffickers will lure women in by promising money and even marriage, which often turns into a false bondage entrapping the women for good. Once trapped in the trafficking system it becomes nearly impossible for a woman to get out. Traffickers will confiscate all money and forms of ID of their victims and can even transport them to a country where they do not know any words in the native tongue. On average, a woman entering sex trafficking has a life span of about 7 years since she entered. Women can pass away from untreated illnesses, drug overdoses and HIV. Majority of sex trafficked victims that enter the United States are female and while sex trafficking has been outlawed my many nations, it does not stop the heinous crime from occurring so often today.

https://www.dosomething.org/us/facts/11-facts-about-human-trafficking

https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC3651545/

http://faculty.webster.edu/woolflm/trafficking.html

Things to Know
52% of children involved in sex trafficking are African American. 91% of young girls involved in STAR court are African American or Latino. With that, 50-90% of children saved from sex trafficking are in the Child Welfare System. Often, children are roped into sex trafficking from a form of catfish. Traffickers will reach out to children through various sites on social media that they can infer have a hard home life, they then grant the child a sense of stability and trust.

In 2016 7,572 sex trafficking cases were reported to the United States hotline for sex trafficking. More than 50% of those people were targeted before they turned 18.

1.8 million children are forced into sex trade each year.

Sex traffickers often target children who appear to be the most vulnerable.

Often times a victims family can be the one abducts them, this often times will go unreported.

http://www.oprah.com/oprahshow/child-sex-trafficking-the-facts/all

https://arkofhopeforchildren.org/child-trafficking/child-trafficking-statistics

https://www2.ed.gov/about/offices/list/oese/oshs/factsheet.html

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sex_trafficking

Women in Classic Blues
Its Origin

Blues originated from African-American slaves working on plantations in the South in the early 19th century. The blues took flourishment in the Mississippi Delta which was near the birthplace of jazz, New Orleans. Blues hadn’t spread across to the Midwest until the late 1930s and early 1940s. There is no singular inventor of this genre. Today we are able to live through this old music that came from exceptional female blues singers like Bessie Smith, and Ma Rainey.

During The Great Depression

The 1930s brought hardship to America as The Great Depression swept abruptly across the United States. Between 1930 and 1935 blues had reached a level of maturity like never before. It’s almost to be said that this was the “Rise of the Blues.” During this time some Classic Female Blues performers had started to struggle and so they slowly began pulling away from blues. Bessie Smith has fallen during the beginning of The Great Depression and had completely stopped making music before her death 1937. She had developed a drinking problem and separated form her second husband. From this two influential female blues singers Janis Joplin and Billie Holiday had allowed the Delta style of blues to live on through them.

Mother of Blues

Ma Rainey who is often refereed to as “The Mother of Blues” had made her first appearance in Columbus, Georgia. At just 12 years old she made her appearance in a talent competition. By the age of 16 she had joined a traveling music act.

Influential Women

Mamie Smith was also a prominent component and performer in the 1920s leading into the beginning of The Great Depression. Though she had abruptly ended her career as a performing artist in 1931. Her recording of “Crazy Blues” is what is now wildly recognized as a turning point for racism in the blues. Up until this time there were few influential African American Female blues singers. Ella Fitzgerald has made her first appearance in 1934 at the Apollo Theater in New York. Ella had swiftly built up a career and today is still known as one of the most influential people in the blues. Up until this point, blues had a momentum and was becoming more and more influential, however at the end of The Great Depression the demand for blues was in decline, and it had fallen off the public want.

Blues in 40's

The 1940s had given the time for a new genre of music to emerge. R&B, otherwise known as Rhythm and Blues.

Article Draft Proposal
Hey Velvet, part of the current assignment (the "Wikipedia Article Draft") asks you to write out a proposal that identifies which Wikipedia article you want to spend some time developing and adding content to, as well as to list some of the very specific ways you think it could be improved. For instance, is there a particular section that could created or added to? Could a certain passage be revised to more closely meet Wikipedia expectations for style? Etc. Etc. The assignment will eventually ask you to add at least 600 words to a Wikipedia article so you'll want to make sure that the article you choose could use some development.

IN addition to this brief proposal, I also ask that you begin to identify 2-3 sources (you'll need 5 eventually) that could be put toward an informal bibliography for this project. Check out more details about the assignment in the google doc: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1-fVOzLLYErkwSDBvqBWV2BKJMmwR0bCdZc5a6PocxSQ/edit?usp=sharing

We'll talk about this during our conference as well.

-Dr. Vetter

Peer Review Response from Sam Benson
I think you have a strong foundation for your article draft here. I would suggest “hipper linking” names and places to other Wikipedia articles. The bottom to do so is next to the button labeled “Cite”. Doing this will help you and your reader use Wikipedia to its full ability. Other than that, I only found small mistakes. I have put they in order with your headings:

Its Origin-

Ø  Paragraph One- When saying “are able to” it becomes a tautology (saying of the same thing twice in different words). You can simply just replace “are able to” with “can”.

During the Great Depression-

Ø  Paragraph One- Watch out for little grammar mistakes. Mostly commas. Also towards the end you have the word “form” when I think you mean “from”.

Mother of Blues-

Ø  Paragraph One- This paragraph looks perfect, except just need to add a comma just “16,”.

Influential Woman-

Ø  Paragraph One- Need to add a comma after “time,”. Also in the sentence “Ella Fitzgerald has made…” you just change that too “Ella Fitzgerald made…” no need for the word has. Lastly, you use the word influential a bit too much. My suggestion would be when you talk about the movement towards the end, instead of saying “influential” say “more prominent”. I can show you in  class what part I am talking about if need be.

Peer Review // Jordan Carter
Your article on Classic Female Blues was pretty good. Your article draft was very well put together and organized. I noticed a few grammatical errors, but that could easily be fixed. There is an app for your computer or any device you may have, that’s called Grammarly, it helps identify and fix small errors, but you do have to pay for premium. Your draft had very informal information. And also you could try to add some wiki-links that could be helpful for future readings as well just in case they need further explanation on a certain subject. Also I would recommend adding more information to your “Mother of Blues” section, if possible. I imagine it’s already well written, but if you could add more then I’d recommend doing so. Other than checking for minor grammatical error and adding more information if possible, your draft is pretty good and well explained.

Article Evaluation // Velvet Salgado
Gender Equality in El Salvador is a very well written article used to represent the laws protecting all men and women in El Salvador. Throughout the entire article, nothing had stuck out to me. I found this article to be neutral, however it only spoken from a third-party view. I feel as if the information on Domestic Violence and on Political involvement of Women in El Salvador could include more information, as both sections were very brief. Some of the citations did not have working links, and the consistency of the style of citations was not uniform. I found a few facts that were referenced from some untrustworthy looking websites, and with the untrustworthy appearances, comes a lot of bias favoring women. A lot of information is dates from 2011-2012. To improve, they can update the statistics and use websites that constantly have updated information. I wish that there were more facts and statistics provided about women in El Salvador in general. The talk page was filled with simple suggestions about expanding on certain subjects to provide readers with the most abundant and recent information possible. The article is graded as a C and is not currently apart of any WikiProjects. I don’t believe this object quite got to its rhetorical objective yet, but once worked on it can be written to its full potential.