User:Lemonlime442/Gwaxdlala/Nalaxdlala (Lull/Hoeya) Marine Refuge/67773skies Peer Review

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Lemonlime442/Gwaxdlala/Nalaxdlala (Lull/Hoeya)
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Content/ organization
- I changed a few of the sentences to be a bit more succinct/ some word choices. I think some of the sentences were a bit too clear to the point of redundancy. Apologies for directly editing the document. I have the original stored so I can put it back too

- because some of the sentences include numbers and statistics, i think some of the information would benefit from also having numbers and statistics

- also in the endangered species section, are you referring to gorgonian corals? it may be helpful to refer to them that way in the article

The article could have put Indigenous involvement under the "history" section because there was some overlap in the information in each section

- I think the section "before the refuge" and "establishment" could have been condensed into a section about the history because the "before" section is a bit short and might not need its own header.

Lead
- included what article was about, where the subject is and why it is formed, which is thorough. If anything could be added though I would suggest including a few more "showy" sounding facts, like adding a sentence about how many species often found in deeper water are found here

- I think the section "before the refuge" and "establishment" could have been condensed into a section about the history because the "before" section is a bit short and might not need its own header.

Overall impressions
- the article was very thorough and well informed. It did not take on a biased stance and included a lot of information relating to the history and ecology that was well structured

-  i think all the hyperlinks were valuable and well placed, the only one that I would suggest would be one for barotrauma

- I noticed the article was primarily about aquatic organisms. I think there would also have been room for the land life forms, though that might also have made the article too long/broad, though it is an area that would be interesting to know more about.

What sections are good and why/ what to keep

- All of the sections of the article cover a wide basis of facts. Some of the writing style I found a bit semantic though I understand that this was for the purpose of clarity. I enjoyed the depictions of both government and local involvement in the conservation and use of the land. Overall the structure is well considered and each section is well structured.

Here is a transcript of what I changed. These are just reworded sentences

The Mamalilikulla First Nation have lived at the Hoeya Sound throughout history and used the land for hunting, fishing and trapping.[1

---> from '''The Mamalilikulla First Nation knows this land better than anyone else as the Hoeya Sound is historically where their clan lived. This land was historically used by the people of the Mamalilikulla community as a village site where community members participated in activities such as hunting, fishing and trapping.'''

added; The salmon found in the area have been depleted to an extent that negatively impacts the grizzly bear population as well. In 2019, the bears were noticeably emaciated.[1]

Hoeya Sound is the only area in coastal British Columbia Primnoa pacifica is found. [1] While shallow, deep ocean shrimp and sponge species such as Eualus townsendi, Hemitripterus bolini the bigmouth sculpin, Aphrocallistes vastus sponge and Amphilectus infundibulus are found there as well.

--> from Primnoa pacifica at this depth is rare, and this is the only area in coastal British Columbia with a Primnoa pacifica population.[1] A few other species that are usually found in deep ocean that are also found in the Hoeya Head Sill include a species of shrimp: Eualus townsendi, Hemitripterus bolini the bigmouth sculpin, and two species of sponges: Aphrocallistes vastus and Amphilectus infundibulus.[1]

Rockfish[1] are protected by the marine refuge. The Rougheye Rockfish type I and II, and the Yelloweye Rockfish[2] are listed under Canada's Species at Risk Act. These fish have a lifespan of up to 200[3] years, with the Yelloweye rockfish specifically living for up to 120 years and reach 50% maturity around 20 years old.[4] Rockfish are vulnerable[5][6] because they often live in the same habitat for their entire life[6] and do not adapt to pressure changes well. When taken out of water, a rockfish will get barotrauma to their closed swim bladders and puff  up.

--> from One of the species protected by Gwaxdlala/Nalaxdlala (Lull/Hoeya) marine refuge is rockfish.[1] There are three different kinds of rockfish listed under Canada's Species at Risk Act, the Rougheye Rockfish type I and II, and the Yelloweye Rockfish.[2] These fish live for a very long time and subsequently take a long time to reach age of sexual maturity.[3] This in combination with their tendency to live in the same habitat their entire life [4] can have adverse effects on the population.[3][4] Rockfish also need protection because when they are taken out of the water it can cause barotrauma due to their closed swim bladders, causing these animals to puff up due to their inability to adapt to pressure changes.[4]