User:Lemurcat111/Kleroterion/Lindsing17 Peer Review

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Lemurcat111
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Evaluate the drafted changes
I like the added image and caption, I would try to make the images fit within certain sections (not cross between two) or put some on the left side for visual interest

good adding more articles. I would look for more/add more in-text citations

the wording changes in the first two sections are far more effective at explaining the method used for the lottery. I would maybe make more paragraphs since it is a bit run-on.

The articel is pretty short but I would consider adding a section about reception at the time? was it critiqued? was it liked?

Otherwise very good edits