User:Leonidas XIV/Miltiades/CrimsonKingsCourt Peer Review

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Leonidas XIV
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Hello, Leonidas XIV

Good work on your editing so far! The page you chose was already developed quite a bit, yet you managed to find holes to fill and make great additions. I have 6 small points and suggestions for you.

I would look to add more information to the Stoa Poikile section. There are currently only two sentences. It would look much better if it was at least three or four sentences long.

I would add more context to "Stesagoras' reign had been tumultuous, full of war and revolt." I would provide an example of a war or revolt that had occurred during his reign and connect the sentence you have written to why it matters that it was tumultuous.

I am not sure where you would find the source for the picture you have but it is my understanding that it is fine to use the picture since it is on another wikipedia article and in the wikipedia commons.

It is fine to have the secondary source as a reference, especially as there is already a variety of primary sources.

The sentence "the Athens to which Miltiades returned was no longer a tyranny, but had overthrown the Peisistratids and become a democracy 15 years earlier," reads a bit weird. I would edit it to make it two sentences, or rewrite it to something more like "The Athenians had overthrown Peisistratids and democratized while Miltiades was ruling the Thracian Chersonese".

Good work so far and good luck on your future editing!