User:LepidopteraMonarch/sandbox

Week 9 - Responding to Peer Feedback
Olivia (Icedburg824) and Juli (Everyday I’m Buffering) both proposed to add phenotypical differences between male and female.

Olivia (Icedburg824) proposed we add a summary of the internal anatomy before talking about it directly. Juli (Everyday I’m Buffering) proposed we explain certain information such as “consists of the duodenum” and subsection the internal anatomy portion into Digestive system, Circulatory system, and Reproductive system. Olivia (Icedburg824) proposed to split each body part into its own section in the external anatomy portion of the page.
 * I think this is a great idea and it will be implemented into the next edit.
 * I was going to do this as a part of my next edit, but have yet to think of a good entrance statement.
 * I am going to focus on internal anatomy for my next edit as I think it is choppy, and I will see if I can create the different systems if they mix smoothly together.


 * This was my first idea and how I originally edited the format, but it made the page extremely long and most subsections only had two sentences. I think for now it would be better with fewer subsections so most of the information is able to flow together.

Olivia (Icedburg824) proposed we add photos such as  a close up of the Perch fish scales and a picture of the swim bladder.


 * We do intend to add more pictures, especially of the swim bladder, when we start dissecting our Perch fish.

Overall, great feedback! I'm glad a lot of the feedback was similar to edits I was already planning to make.

Week 7 - Peer Review Feedback
Everyday I’m Buffering

Neutral content

-        Yes, content doesn’t show any bias

Reliable sources

-        Two sources linked which lead back to wikipedia pages

Clear structure:

Is this draft well organized? Can you follow it easily

-        Yes, it shows a clear plan of what the editor would like to do to make the page better

What pages will be edited?

-        The flightless bird page

Who will do the editing/adding of what topics/ pages?

-        “Everyday I’m Buffering” is going to discuss the anatomy of birds that can fly compared to birds that can not. They will add pictures to show the difference in anatomy specifically muscle structure and possibly the bird wing to body ratio that is required for flight.

Does there seem to be an even distribution of contribution from all team members?

-        From what I can see, each team member in team chicken is editing a different article

What sorts of contributions with regard to images are planned?

-        Showing the different anatomy of birds specifically muscle structure

Do you see where this content might fit from the information provided?

Meaning...can you see what part of an article and what page this will go in?

-        Yes, the flightless bird page; however, I could not immediately tell what their project animal was.

Integration:

Does anything link up with something you or your team is working on? How can you help each other?

-        Not that I can see

Do they link to other relevant pages in the text of their draft?

-        Yes, their page links to the “Keel (bird anatomy)”

As you review, copy, edit (in the talk page by editing a copy of their content) the material and make spelling, grammar, and other suggestions.

Suggest to add the picture they’re thinking about using. Create a draft maybe adding more details about the exact difference and references you would use to talk about that.

Peer review:

'''Everyday I’m Buffering’s draft for week six shows edits that will be made to the “Morphological changes and energy conservation” section of the flightless bird page, but without assumption I couldn’t tell what their project animal would be. It seems that each team member is editing a different article, so I would be unable to see if equal contribution is applied; however, their sandbox shows a clear plan that they are going to focus on adding images and not editing the word content of the page, so no outside links were used. They plan to add pictures to show the difference in anatomy specifically muscle structure and possibly the bird’s wing to body ratio that is required for flight.'''

Suggestions:

'''Find and add the picture they’re thinking about using. Create a draft maybe adding more details about the exact difference and references you would use to talk about that. Some of the sentences in the “Morphological changes and energy conservation” section is very hard to understand and could use some editing.'''

Scientist06

Neutral content

-        Yes, no bias

Reliable sources

-        Yes, three reliable sources

Clear structure:

Is this draft well organized? Can you follow it easily

-        Yes; however, it does use a lot of large words that someone outside of biology wouldn’t be able to understand. I also can’t see where this would be added to the paragraph that is already on the wiki page.

What pages will be edited?

-        Bat Flight page

Who will do the editing/adding of what topics/ pages?

-        Bat wing evolution

Does there seem to be an even distribution of contribution from all team members?

-        Yes

What sorts of contributions with regard to images are planned?

-        Image/s are planned, but not able to be shown as copyright isn’t owned

Do you see where this content might fit from the information provided?

Meaning...can you see what part of an article and what page this will go in?

-        No, I don’t see how the draft fits into the “evolution“ section of bat wings page

Integration:

Does anything link up with something you or your team is working on? How can you help each other?

-        No

Do they link to other relevant pages in the text of their draft?

-        No, they do not have any links to other Wikipedia pages

As you review, copy, edit (in the talk page by editing a copy of their content) the material and make spelling, grammar, and other suggestions.

Peer review:

'''I believe Scientist06 draft for week six shows they want to add information to the “Bat wing evolution” section of the Bat Flight page. I don’t see exactly where in the section this information would be added and the draft uses a lot of large words that someone outside of the science field wouldn’t be able to understand. They do link to good reliable sources, but no links to Wikipedia pages. Images are planned, another way to add the image for draft purposes is to add the image link.'''

Suggestions:

'''Add the original Wikipedia section to your sandbox and show where your edit would fit into the section or what else you would edit out of the section. Also, try to simplify the words so someone outside of the STEM field will be able to look at the Wikipedia page and understand the basic concept, also add Wikipedia links.'''

Azyla.m

Neutral content

- Yes, no bias seen

Reliable sources

-        Yes, three reliable sources and the “rat” Wikipedia source

Clear structure:

Is this draft well organized? Can you follow it easily

-        Somewhat organized, for the “Laboratory rat” page I don’t see where the draft would add to the section.

-        For the Muridae page, I can see the edits that have been made from the original

What pages will be edited?

-        Two pages, the laboratory rat and Muridae pages

Who will do the editing/adding of what topics/ pages?

-        Azyla.m will add to the “research section” of the laboratory rat page and add to the “reproductive section” of the Muridae page

Does there seem to be an even distribution of contribution from all team members?

-        Yes

What sorts of contributions with regard to images are planned?

-        No plans for images

Do you see where this content might fit from the information provided?

Meaning...can you see what part of an article and what page this will go in?

-        Yes for the Muridae page, but not for the laboratory rat page

Integration:

Does anything link up with something you or your team is working on? How can you help each other?

-        No

Do they link to other relevant pages in the text of their draft?

-        Yes, two pages have been linked, but I think more could have been linked.

As you review,copy edit (in the talk page by editing a copy of their content) the material and make spelling, grammar, and other suggestions.

Peer review:

'''Azyla.m’s draft for week six shows they will be working on two articles, the laboratory rat article and muridae article. They will add to the “research”  section of the laboratory rat article and add to the “reproductive” section of the muridae article. The organization of the muridae draft is very good, but I am unable to see where the draft of the Laboratory rat article will fit into the “research” section. Great references were used, but more Wikipedia links can be added to the draft.'''

Suggestions:

'''Add where the draft for the “research” section of the laboratory rat article will fit into the original section or add the original Wikipedia section to your sandbox and show what you would edit within the section. Add Wikipedia links to their draft.'''

Week 6 - Continuing to work on the Perch page (Information in selected team members sandbox - Heather)
Related Media - Perch Fish Anatomy

External Anatomy

 * Body
 * The body shape of a perch is long and rounded which allows for fast swimming in the water. The mouth is found at the anterior end of the fish with the anus or cloaca located at the posterior before the tail, which is the remaining end of the posterior formed from vertebrae and the spinal cord. Perch are vertebrates with a flexible rod shaped notochord running down the length of the animal directly above the gastrointestinal tract and a hollow tube of nerve tissue creating the spinal cord directly above the notochord. Perch have an exoskeleton which is the outer shell and an endoskeleton which is the structural support inside the body, Perch are bony fish so these skeletons are composed of bone. The outside of the body is comprised of scales which originate from the mesoderm, Perch fish specifically have ctenoid scales . Fish have a lateral line (located along the body of the fish horizontally) which is a sense organ used to detect movement via vibrations.
 * Head
 * The head consists of the skull (formed from loosely connected bones), eyes, mouth, operculum, gills, a pair of nostrils (which has no connection to the oral cavity) and the spiracle . Perch have strong jaws with a lower jaw (Mandible) that protrudes outward as they stay close to the ground and an upper jaw (Maxilla) that is fixed in place. They have small brushlike teeth across their jaws and on the roof of their mouth, they are missing canine teeth most commonly seen in walleye or sauger fish . Fish have a spherical shaped lens in their eyes with a retina that has both rod and cone cells . The gills are located under the operculum on both sides of the head and are used to extract oxygen molecules from water and expel carbon dioxide; the gills have gill rakers inside the mouth.
 * Fins
 * Perch fins (dorsal, pectoral, pelvic, anal, and caudal) are made of bony fin rays and have no direct connection to the spine except for the caudal fin. Perch fish have two dorsal fins, a spiny dorsal fin towards the anterior of the body and a soft dorsal fin towards the posterior of the body. A pair of Pectoral fins which are found on each side of the middle of the body closer to the anterior end. A pair of Pelvic fins which are found on each side of the body below the pectoral fins. An Anal fin which is located between the anus and the caudal fin. A Caudal fin (supported by soft rays) which is located at the posterior end. The caudal fin is forked (split in half) and rounded . Perch fish lack an adipose fin most commonly seen on trout and salmon between the dorsal and caudal fins.

Internal Anatomy
The intestines of Perch consist of the small intestine and large intestine; the intestines have many pyloric caeca and a spiral value, the small intestine consists of the duodenum. The esophagus is a flexible tube that goes from the mouth to the stomach. The stomach is connected to the intestine via the pyloric sphincter. The spleen is located after the stomach and before the spiral value. The spleen is connected to the circulatory system, not part of the digestive tract. The liver is composed of three lobes: one small lobe (includes the gall bladder) and two large lobes. Perch have long and narrow kidneys that contain clusters of nephrons which empty into the mesonephric duct. They have a two chambered heart consisting of four compartments: the sinus venous, one atrium, one ventricle, and conus. Perch fish have a swim bladder that helps control buoyancy or floating within the water, the swim bladder is only found in bony fish. Perch fish reproductive organs include either a pair of testes (sperm producing) or a pair of ovaries (egg producing)

Anatomy Outline

 * Body
 * The body shape of a perch is long and rounded which allows for fast swimming in the water. The mouth is found at the anterior end of the fish with the anus or cloaca located at the posterior before the tail, which is the remaining end of the posterior formed from vertebrae and the spinal cord. Perch are vertebrates with a flexible rod shaped notochord running down the length of the animal directly above the gastrointestinal tract and a hollow tube of nerve tissues creating the spinal cord directly above the notochord.
 * Skeleton
 * Perch have an exoskeleton which is the outer shell and an endoskeleton which is the structural support inside the body, Perch are bony fish so these skeletons are composed of bone. The fins are also made of bony fin rays and have no direct connection to the spine except for the caudal fin.
 * Head
 * The head is consists of the skull (formed from loosely connected bones), eyes, mouth, operculum, gills, a pair of nostrils (which has no connection to the oral cavity) and the spiracle.
 * Jaw
 * Perch have strong jaws with a lower jaw that protrudes outward as they stay close to the ground and an upper jaw that is fixed in place. They have small brushlike teeth across their jaws and on the roof of their mouth, they are missing canine teeth most commonly seen in walleye or sauger fish.
 * Eyes
 * Fish have a spherical shaped lens in their eyes with a retina that has both rod and cone cells.
 * Gills
 * The gills are located under the operculum on both sides of the head and are used to extract oxygen molecules from water and expel carbon dioxide; the gills have gill rakers inside the mouth.
 * Skin
 * The outside of the body is comprised of scales which originate from the mesoderm, Perch fish specifically have ctenoid scale.
 * Lateral Line
 * The lateral line (located along the body of the fish horizontally) is a sense organ used by fish to detect movement via vibrations.
 * Fins
 * Perch fish have two dorsal fins, a spiny dorsal fin towards to anterior of the body and a soft dorsal fin towards the posterior of the body
 * Pelvic fins are found on each side of the body below the pectoral fins.
 * Caudal fin (supported by soft rays) is located at the posterior end. The caudal fin is forked (split in half) and rounded
 * Anal fin is located between the anus and caudal fin
 * Pectoral fins are found on each side of the middle of the body closer to the anterior end.
 * Perch fish lack an adipose fin most commonly seen on trout and salmon between the dorsal and caudal fins.
 * Intestines
 * The intestines of Perch consist of the small intestine and large intestine; the intestine has many pyloric caeca and a spiral value, the small intestine consists of the duodenum.
 * Stomach
 * The esophagus is a flexible tube that goes from the mouth to the stomach. The stomach is connected the intestine via the pyloric sphincter.
 * Kidneys
 * Fish have narrow and long kidneys that contain clusters of nephrons which empty into the mesonephric duct.
 * Spleen
 * The spleen is located after to the stomach and before the spiral value. The spleen is connected to the circulatory system, not part of the digestive tract.
 * Liver
 * The liver is composed of three lobes: one small lobe (includes the gall bladder) and two large lobes.
 * Heart
 * Two chambered heart consisting of four compartments: the sinus venous, one atrium, one ventricle, and conus
 * Swim bladder
 * Perch fish have a swim bladder that helps control buoyancy or floating within the water, the swim bladder is only found in bony fish.
 * Reproductive system (Testes or Ovaries)
 * Perch fish reproductive organs include either a pair of testes (sperm producing) or a pair of ovaries (egg producing)

Original:
The general body type of a perch is somewhat long and rounded. True perch have "rough" or ctenoid scales. On the anterior side of the head are the maxilla and lower mandible for the mouth, a pair of nostrils, and two lidless eyes. On the posterior sides are the opercular series, which protect the gills, and the lateral line system, which is sensitive to vibrations in the water. The kidney of the perch runs along the backbone and forms a head, caudal to the gills. Perch have paired pectoral and pelvic fins, and two dorsal fins, the first one spiny and the second soft. These two fins can be separate or joined.

First Draft
The body shape of a perch is long and rounded which allows for fast swimming in water.

True perch have "rough" or ctenoid scales. On the anterior side of the head are the maxilla and lower mandible for the mouth, a pair of nostrils, and two lidless eyes. On the posterior sides are the opercular series, which protect the gills, and the lateral line system, which is sensitive to vibrations in the water. The kidney of the perch runs along the backbone and forms a head, caudal to the gills. Perch have paired pectoral and pelvic fins, and two dorsal fins, the first one spiny and the second soft. These two fins can be separate or joined.


 * Pancreas?
 * Central nervous System
 * Cerebellum
 * (Immune system)

Week 4 - Choosing Articles (Perch)
Perch (No link for maxilla and lower mandible for the mouth in anatomy section, Anatomy section only covers outside anatomy)

Missing a lot of perch species such as Surfperch, Barber perch, Estuary perch, Golden perch, Macquarie perch, Pirate perch, White perch, Rock perch, Sacramento perch, Silver perch, Climbing perch, Japanese perch, Pond perch, and Blue perch


 * Nostril (No organization, everything is in one large section. Talks briefly about different animals but not uses or anatomy.)

Bottom fishing - Confusing and repetitive language Fish anatomy
 * Stomach
 * Predatory fish - Confusing and repetitive language. Not organized, talks about everything in one big section. No pictures


 * Spiral valve


 * Gill raker (One large section, can add more Wikipedia links)
 * Oviparity

Dorsal fin


 * Epaxial and hypaxial muscles (Written in the format for a professional to understand)

Week 3 - Article Review (Introduction)
Comparative anatomy is the study of similarities and differences in the anatomy of different species. It is closely related to evolutionary biology and phylogeny (the evolution of species).

The science began in the classical era, continuing in Early Modern times with work by Pierre Belon who noted the similarities of the skeletons of birds and humans.

Comparative anatomy has provided evidence of common descent, and has assisted in the classification of animals.


 * Comparative anatomy is the study of similarities and differences in the anatomy of different species in order to understand the changes that have taken place during evolution from common ancestors.