User:Leroyjoenoes/Vaccinology/Audrickya29 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Leroyjoenoes


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Leroyjoenoes/Vaccinology?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

side effects of vaccines are remarkably safe


 * Maybe can be more neutral. For example "generally safe for majority of people"
 * I think "rare and non rare side effect documented" should be the challenge of vaccine as well.

Overview of Vaccines:

A vaccine is a biological substance that may be used to safely produce an immune response that protects against infection and/or sickness when exposed to a pathogen in the future. Most vaccines require one or more protein antigens to elicit immune responses that give protection.


 * Can be put in the beginning of the paragraph for better flow. Make the paragraph flows from general ---> specific topic.'

Vaccines Induce Antibodies:

There is substantial evidence that diverse forms of functional antibodies play a crucial role in vaccine-induced protection. There is substantial evidence that diverse types of functional antibodies play a key role in vaccine-induced protection, and this evidence comes from three primary sources: immunodeficiency states, passive protection studies, and immunological data.


 * Repeating sentences, can be more concise.

Passive Protection:


 * A bit confusing seems contradictory. Can pregnant woman transmit to fetus? Are all vaccine cannot be passed from mother to child passively? Or restricted to group B and syncytial virus only?

Feature of Vaccine Protection:

Some vaccines, in addition to preventing disease, may also protect against asymptomatic infection or colonization, reducing pathogen acquisition and thus its onward transmission and, as a result, establishing herd immunity. Vaccines are created to protect against clinical manifestations of infection. They may also help to prevent asymptomatic infection or colonization.


 * Repeating

Immune Memory:

immune memory is sufficient for protection against pathogens.


 * Maybe should be backed by data, prevent one sided claim.