User:LetsTalk2022/Multicommunicating/Autumn1297 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

LetsTalk2022


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:LetsTalk2022/Multicommunicating?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Multicommunicating

Evaluate the drafted changes
I believe your edit to the article can take place elsewhere. The opening sentence of the original article does have a minor grammatical/spelling error, rather than "conversations", it sounds smoother as conversation, but I don't think it necessarily has to be changed. Maybe if you want to work on that sentence you can elaborate on your findings from that article.

LetsTalk2022 has made much better edits than the first time around. The edits are clearer and easier to comprehend with the elaboration. The last sentence to the first paragraph I would re-read because I think there's a mistake in it making it harder to understand. For the edit under "multi communication and multitasking" I don't believe the extraction of the sentence has to be made. I think the way it was originally writing was fine. The edit under "presences allocator" is good and a helpful segment to that section of the article. After these few adjustments, I would start moving your edits onto the article itself.