User:Lewis.tristen/1837 Great Plains smallpox epidemic/Yogilover3 Peer Review

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Lewis.tristen - 1837 Great Plains smallpox epidemic
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This Wiki article provided on the 1837 Great Plains smallpox epidemic shows the devastating impact of the disease on Native American populations. The lead section is not the main lead section in the existing article, but does seem strong and gets your attention.

In terms of content, the article discusses the symptoms of smallpox as well as the measures taken by Native communities for containment. The historical narrative shows the poor support from the U.S. government and sheds light on the systemic neglect faced by the tribes during this crisis. However, this could probably be expanded to provide more insight into the broader political environment of the time, which might have contributed to the epidemic.

In the first section on Symptoms, there is a sentence: "...disease could be contacted through close contact..." I believe this should be restated with "contracted" and look like this: "...disease could be contracted through close contact..."

Also, the History section has a sentence in the first paragraph: "...they reported being denying access to such..." I feel this should be restated with "denied" and look like this: "...they reported being denied access to such..."

The tone of the article is somewhat neutral but leans towards critiquing the U.S. government's actions during the epidemic. There is a balance in describing both the symptoms and the historical circumstances surrounding the epidemic, but more could be done to offer contrasting perspectives or additional narratives that might present a better understanding of the event.

The references and sources seem to support the content in the article. They do seem to be older sources however. The first source is from a magazine and I'm not sure how reliable it is.

The Bibliography page seems to have the relevant sources listed and cited. I don't see a Bibliography section with notes on the references, or the outline of proposed changes but those may be somewhere else in the sandbox. The page looks clean though and doesn't have any extras.

Overall, the sections provide a basic understanding of the 1837 Great Plains smallpox symptoms and history, especially from the perspective of Native American experiences and U.S. government actions.