User:Lg720/Kolami language/Tom Wulfric Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Lg720


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Lg720/Kolami language
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Kolami language

Lead
The lead paragraph opens with a straight forward and concise introduction, and in general holds much more information than the original stub.

The lead does not include a description of the future/planned sections of the article.

The lead is not overbearing with information in the slightest, and in fact could hold a bit more, at least enough to introduce and briefly discuss the upcoming sections.

Content
All of the content thus far is relevant to the topic, and appears to be up to date. The census data is from 2011, but oftentimes it is very difficult to find an accurate and recent census on an endangered language. A suggestion I may offer would be that a more up to date census might be available in a different language that is closer to Kolami than English.

There is no content in the article that seems out of place, and any missing information is sure to be added as the article is updated in the future.

Images and Media
There are no attached images and Media as of now.

Tone and Balance
The content is neutral, spoken in an informative tone without any bias.

Considering the informative tone of the article, there is no information so far that is written in a way to sway the readers to a viewpoint. As of now, the tone is only factual, without a definitive "viewpoint."

Sources and References
One of the first things that I noticed while reading the article was the lack of a bibliography. The sources given for this article are all listed in the "References" section. References should be used as an area to directly link information to the corresponding source.

This area of sources and referencing is where this article appears to be lacking the most.

If the information in the article is in fact backed up by a credible source, it is impossible to tell without searching each source listed under references for the data that the information was taken from. Therefore, I also cannot tell whether or not the information transferred from the sources accurately reflect the source itself.

The references also do not include links to the website, article, or other literature that the information came from. Besides a link, there also is not a URL imbedded within the reference that allows me to follow through on information.

After some research on the authors of these sources, there is a good array of authors, many of Indian decent. This is advantageous for this article, considering the language is spoken in India. Several of the sources come from Colleges, Linguistic studies and conferences, and official census information. Overall, they are all very credible and thorough.

Although 10 sources are already listed, there seems to be ample information available on the Kolami language, should the need arise for additional references. JSTOR has several pages worth of information on the language all coming from credible authors and institutes.

Despite these critiques, the sources do appear to be formatted properly in the APA style.

Organization
Though only the lead is available, the organization is very clear and concise, flowing well from one sentence to another.

The article is also error free as far as grammar, spelling, and punctuation are concerned.

Considering the size of the current article, there isn't any non sequitur information that I would remove.

Overall Impression
The article is headed in the right direction. It is free of bias, well written, and spoken in an encyclopedic tone. The current state of the article is solely informative, and would best be kept that way to avoid breaking the balance. The added information by user "Lg720" is very insightful and useful, and goes into much more detail than the previously unedited stub. So far, there is not anything in the writing that does not relate to the topic, and therefore nothing needs to be removed.

My main point of concern is the referencing. Without being able to directly link information to the proper source, it becomes extremely difficult to validate what is being read. Reference links should be added after every fact, and URL's or links should be embedded within the sources. That being said, a bibliography is also necessary to separate the reference material within the text from the complete list of sources.

Some possible sections to add to this article would be: Alphabet, Culture, Syn-tax, Phonology, Semantics, and pragmatics.