User:Lgarmon4/Cross-cultural psychiatry/Kyt735 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Lgarmon4


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Lgarmon4/Cross-cultural_psychiatry?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Cross-cultural psychiatry

Evaluate the drafted changes
This review is under the assumption that it is adding to the article as a new section rather then editing one within the article. If this is a new section, it needs a name. Content wise, the entry stays relevant to what the rest of the article provides. Though there may be some slight bias when regarding the last sentence after "however". When discussing how people in Chinese culture may describe depression as a heavy feeling, there is no evidence exactly backing it. While this is a personal opinion, instead of exactly stating people in Chinese culture, but instead state a culture with language disconnects. Another problem may be how the section specifically discusses depression, but there should be some mention of general psychiatric disorders like personality disorders and PTSD. Otherwise there are no problems with the content in the edit. The tone and organization is just fine too as it is smooth and quite easy to read through. For the resource though, the resource being used is from a very old study in 1985. A more recent study should be used to provide better evidence rather then a study from 1985. Overall, the edit provides more insight to the topic and is heading in a good direction.