User:Lheiler02/Renewable energy law/Jimmygotclass Peer Review

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Lheiler02
User:Lheiler02/Renewable energy law

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * I believe you were adding a new subheading to an article with an already existing lead, so I don't think you had a lead. Your topic sentence was concise and to the point.

Content

 * All information added is relevant to the rest of the article, although I don't notice many dates or specific years in your additions, whereas the rest of the original article is very specific about chronology... maybe consider adding those to add more authority to your writing, so it's less general.
 * I do wonder where in the article you plan to insert your additions- just consider chronology of events and I think you'll be fine
 * Does not pertain to any of Wikipedia's equity gaps

Tone and Balance

 * I feel that this is unbiased, and well informed. Perhaps if there are any statistics or studies about areas where Germany has fallen short of sustainability standards, or been criticized while implementing the renewable energy sources act, you could ass more of a dual-perspective to this topic.

Sources and References

 * great sources, look thorough and credible
 * there should be a citation probably at least once in the first 4 sentences, otherwise that is your own thinking and not paraphrased from a source
 * third link does not work

Organization

 * some grammatical errors/areas where the language could be more formal, my suggestions are bolded
 * your first sentence could be "Germany is a global leader in renewable energy legislation" since that sounds somewhat more sophisticated
 * second sentence grammar: "to lower carbon emissions, Germany needs an energy...to renewable energies" ...also maybe say that energy reforms range from fossil fuel to wind power, instead of "things"
 * third sentence; "Energiewende, directly translating to 'energy transition'"
 * fifth sentence: "To speed up investment to support Renewable energy systems, feed-in tariffs.."
 * 6th sentence: "With these feed in tariffs, the primary consumption"
 * 7th sentence: "This transition is also heavily supported by the German people; 92% say..."

Images and Media

 * not applicable, I don't think you added any

Overall Evaluation

 * I think your contributions to the article were valuable and shed light on a very specific example of where renewable energy laws are being implemented. You were concise and gave a good summary, so it is clear to the reader how current and significant the topic is in current events. Just needs a few grammar fixes!