User:Lhernandez152/User:Aguayo Adriana/Eamon Ore-Giron/Bibliography/Lhernandez152 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Adriana Aguayo, and their article is on Eamon Ore-Giron


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Aguayo Adriana/Eamon Ore-Giron/Bibliography
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Lead
Has the lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?

Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's content?

Tone and Balance

 * 1) Is the added content neutral?
 * 2) * Yes, there is no attempt at persuasion or anything that would be considered "not neutral"
 * 3) Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * 4) * No, everything is neutral

Organization

 * 1) Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * 2) * Yes, in the beginning, there should be a comma after "Los Angeles".
 * 3) * A few times, "Eamon Ore-Giron" is spelled "Eamon Ore- Giron" with a space after the hyphen.
 * 4) * "Dj" should be "DJ"
 * 5) * Under "Education", the Bachelor's Degree should probably be listed first since that's how it goes chronologically. First his degree from 1996 and then the Master's in 2006.
 * 6) * In !Oye, Miral!, one of the exhibitions, should the first exclamation mark be the inverted one? ¡Oye, Miral! -Probably should because it's in spanish.
 * 7) *In the exhibit "Glitch" from 2006, you mispelled "Los Angeles" as "Losa Angeles"
 * 8) *In the "Location" section of the exhibitions, you should put the City, State, Country. I'm not entirely sure where Careyes is in Mexico, so it would be useful to have the state added in.
 * 9) *Probably a nitpick, but if you are going to use the abbreviation for The United States "USA", maybe use the two or three letter abbreviation of the others too. Denmark, for example, is DK. Mexico is MX. Any others can be found online.
 * 10) *Under "Phantom Sightings: Art After the Chicano Movement" (2008), separate the locations to be easier to read. Below I'll show what you have, and a way I would suggest:
 * 11) Under the Exhibits, you should find precise dates of their exhibition and not just the year, if possible. For example, here is the one for the LAXART "Morococha" exhibit: http://archive.laxart.org/exhibitions/view/eamon-ore-giron-morococha/#images. That seems to be the official museum website and it says January 10 - February 28, 2015 is when the exhibit happened. Cite this in the "Ref" section. Their resume itself is not enough. Plus, the museum websites sometimes show some of the artwork displayed, which could be helpful if other people research this artist in the future.
 * 12) Under "Savage Curio" in Group Exhibitions, the venue says "Et al". I don't think this is the venue because "et al" means "and others", which is used when there is a long list of people, so you do not have to write each name. I checked their CV but I have no clue what the venue could be.
 * 13) Under "LA>" in 2009, you put that the venue was "LA>ART" instead of "LA><ART"

Sources and References

 * 1) Are the sources thorough - i.e Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * 2) * Not many sources are used. And out of the six sources cited, three of them are the same source, citing different parts of it. Maybe there is little information, but try to find other sources to use.
 * 3) Do the links work?
 * 4) * Yes, all of the sources work, since they were retrieved recently.
 * 5) The bibliography section is incomplete, so it is difficult to evaluate how the source is going to be used

For new articles only

 * 1) Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
 * 2) * There are four sources used. One of them is the artist's CV, another is his artsy page. The other two are independent from the artist, but are not used for much information.
 * 3) It would be good to include an infobox with the artist's name, date and place of birth, nationality; stuff like that