User:Lhorne2024/Jesus Colon/Shivamsaran Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

@Lhorne2024


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Lhorne2024/Jesus Colon
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Jesús Colón

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'''Overall, the article is well-written. From the start, it adds more integral introductory information about Jesus Colon, which is much better than the one-liner in the currently published Jesus Colon wikipedia page. However, it doesn't include his nickname as the Father of the Nuyorican Movement, which seems worthy of being included. Also, perhaps a little bit more information can be added about his parents, if available.''' =====

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'''As for the content, it is very relevant and objective. The author has detailed information about the type of political movements he was involved in and even the specific organizations that he played a role in. My only suggestion would be to include more content on the actual organizations, such as Ateneo Obrero Hispano and Alianza Obrera Puertorriqueña. Also, since the title of this section is "New York City," I think the author should specify the environment of New York at the time and how Colon was integrated into that environment. Grafico is also mentioned more than once, without any new information, so it sounds a little repetitive.''' =====

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'''The tone and balance of the essay is very unbiased and straightforward. There doesn't seem to be any personal bias in the writing, which is good. Even though the topic can be viewed as controversial, the author does a great job of talking about socialist movements purely in terms of numbers and historical accounts. There is certainly missing content about Jesus Colon, which is expected because the article isn't finished yet, but I would strongly suggest including information on the influence of his work, what ended up happening to Grafico, and his later years in life (After his political/journalism career was over), etc.''' ===== '''Finally, the author should definitely try to include a few more sources, simply for credibility and to strengthen the validity of the content in the article. Overall though, the article is very well-written and starts to really paint a picture of who Jesus Colon truly is. Great job!'''

P.S. Including a few pictures in the article would be nice.