User:LiLonghao/Cultivation theory/Celinaseguin Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

LiLonghao


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:LiLonghao/Cultivation theory
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Cultivation theory

Peer Review
It seems like the article draft is up to a great start!

Content
Content seems to be underdeveloped. Is there a specific section of the article that you are going to expand on or further develop?

Sources and References
The quality and reliability of the academic sources chosen is great! However, it appears your links include 'proxy' which indicates the article is not widely accessible (one would need access to the University database). I don't think wikipedia will let you use this in your final draft because the general public cannot use it, so you may have to search for the article with an alternate link.

In addition, citations should be created that can be used in the article reference list, rather than solely including the link.