User:LiLonghao/Cultivation theory/Dunsno Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

LiLonghao


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:LiLonghao/Cultivation theory
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Cultivation theory

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

- "It can be defined as when people" sounds incorrect. Could it be replaced with ";For example, when"

- "who was a communication and dean professor" could become "when he was a communication professor and dean"

- Good citation of article

- Clear and concise information

- Photo is good-- caption could be changed to his name, and then who he is (his title)

- Cite image?

- Could add direct links between the pages of Gerbner and his theory