User:Liam Raviv Patterson/Cape Meares Light/StaceySmithOSU Peer Review

Prof. Smith comments on Wikipedia article first draft
Hi Liam,

I'm providing my comments on your first article draft here. I should start by saying that I didn't realize that the lighthouse already had a fairly extensive article. That is making it somewhat difficult for me to gauge the originality of your writing and research compared to the original. Your improvements seem substantially different, but I'm still left uncertain what is your work and what is from the original. I had to use the version history of the article to sort things out, which added a layer of complexity. I would just ask that you be as careful as possible to make sure that all of your new additions are in your own words.

Lead:

This looks very good!

Content:

Can you explain the significance of the ruby bulls-eye prisms and why they were sought after? Were they actually pieces of ruby, the precious gem?

Do you have any information about why and how the lighthouse got onto the National Register?

Style:

Watch out for passive voice. I see a lot of it in your article draft. Please go back and eliminate passive voice as part of your revision and polishing process.

Capitalize Congress throughout the article.

References:

These all looked excellent!