User:LibraryKat95/Ibi Zoboi/Kjosowski Peer Review

Peer review
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General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? LibraryKat95, Gruzsa, Mgrone
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Gruzsa/598 Sandbox

Lead evaluation
The lead is missing.

Content evaluation
In the section "Early life" I'm left wondering if her mother was also forced to remain in Haiti or if Zoboi was separated from her mother. I'm also interested in more about this incident. The information added to the "Career" section is great, but I think the term hometown in the second-to-last sentence should be changed to Port-au-Prince (I assume that's where is meant by hometown). I'm also interested if Zoboi spends much time in Haiti as an adult. I don't know anything about Zoboi's 2019 novel mentioned in the "Selected works" section and am wondering if that character has ties to Haiti.

Tone and balance evaluation
The added content is neutral.

Sources and references evaluation
The added content is cited, but one citation (number six) is to a Kickstarter campaign set up by Zoboi, so I don't know if it counts as an independent source. I think more more information could be used from these or other sources to provide a more complete picture of Zoboi and her work. Citations need to be checked or added for some of the information from the original article.

Organization evaluation
The added information is mostly clear. However, the added sentence in the "Early life" section is a little long and clumsy. Maybe try breaking it into two sentences. In the "Career" section refer to the earlier comment about the word hometown. The sections as a whole make sense, are clearly labeled, the information in each is appropriate for the section, and they are well-ordered.

Images and media evaluation
No images were added.

Overall evaluation
The content added provides more background information on Zoboi and her most recent projects. Adding more information about the author and her most recent book will provide readers with a better idea of who this author is and what her writing is about.