User:LibraryKat95/Ibi Zoboi/Maggie.htj Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? (provide username)
 * LibraryKat95, Gruzsa, Mgrone
 * Link to draft you're reviewing:
 * User:Gruzsa/598 Sandbox

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?

Lead evaluation
The draft I am reviewing doesn't appear to have a lead yet. The lead that exists in the published article is concise and clear. It is not overly detailed. The introductory sentence in the published article clearly describes the subject of the article, providing information about the background and profession of the author in question. The Lead also does not contain information that is not later expanded upon in the body of the article. However, the Lead does not yet include a description of the article's sections. In the next draft, the Lead should be updated to reflect the sections of the article and the new information added.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * Is the content added up-to-date?
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?

Content evaluation
The content added to the article is relevant to the topic and includes background into the early life of the subject, her achievements, as well as up-to-date information about the novels she is publishing. All of the content that is present is appropriate for the article. I would suggest expanding on the information to make it clearer for users. For example, a brief description of Kickstarter, the corporation that supported Zoboi's writing project, would be useful to readers. I would also suggest expanding on the information about the author's early life. The article from Bookpage.com cited in that section includes further information about Zoboi's life including her area of study in college, her participation in slam poetry in New York, the name she was called during her childhood, Pascale, and the name she chose as an adult, Ibi. This information as well as any other information available could round out the section on her background.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?

Tone and balance evaluation
The content added to the article is neutral and does not appear biased. It is all factual or based off of interviews with Zoboi herself. It does not seem that view points are either over- or underrepresented and none of the content attempts to persuade the reader one way or another. I would suggest, however, adding a qualifier to the sentence "One of the reasons she started this workshop was to give Haitian girls a voice and ways to see themselves in literature" such as "According to Zoboi," to make it clear that this information came from the subject herself.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * Are the sources current?
 * Check a few links. Do they work?

Sources and references evaluation
All the information added is backed up by a reliable secondary source. The sources are current and the links work. They also appear to be fairly thorough, although I think some of the sources could be used more to provide further information in the body of the article.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

Organization evaluation
The information is well written and concise. Clarifying information could be helpful in one or two places, such as the Kickstarter example I mentioned in the Content section above. I found only one grammatical error; the sentence "Zoboi is a graduate of the Clarion West Writers Workshop. as well as a winner of the 2011 Gulliver Travel Grant" should not contain a period after "Workshop." The added content is also well-organized within the article.

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * How can the content added be improved?

Overall evaluation
The added content has improved the overall quality of the article but could be expanded further from the sources cited. The content added is clear and concise, unbiased, and thoroughly cited. I would suggest the minor edits mentioned above as well as expanding upon the added information to round out the article.