User:Lightfootcrytpkeeper/Tomb of Seti I/Dullaten45 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Lightfootcryptkeeper


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * N/A (No edits to actual draft, on article itself), Tomb of Seti I (current version of article post-edits)


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * N/A

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Given that there is no specific sandbox to critique but a full article that edits have already been made to, the peer review will be evaluating the article as a single entity as opposed to the current version of the article relative to your sandbox or edits)

Lead
The lead's first sentence is a strong introductory sentence that is both informative by way of giving the multiple names the tomb its location but is also not overly verbose. The lead gives a brief overview of the two main sections of the article but could maybe include a bit more of the aspects of each, but the concise nature of it is still good.

Content
The content in the article is both relevant and up-to-date, with nothing appearing to be missing or out of place.

Tone and Balance
Some aspects of tone could be improved, if only slightly. The "best decorated" sentence in the lead could be changed to something that sounds less like a value judgement. The section in the Design and Decoration section regarding the Opening of the Mouth Ceremony should either include a more detailed neutral description of the importance of the ceremony or should cut out the "very important" designation and "in depth view" portion of the section. The "excellent condition" designation in the conservation section could be replaced with something like calling it well-preserved as opposed to using the word "excellent." In terms of balance, there is nothing given undue attention or too little attention so far as I can tell, nor is there any bias or weighted viewpoint that I can see.

Sources and References
Sources are up to date, thorough, diverse, and reputable. Additionally, they are reasonably interspersed throughout and there are no gaps in the citations so far as I can tell with no dead links.

Organization
Good organization of ideas. The segments are also reasonably concise while not leaving out any information. The grammar on the final sentence in the first paragraph of the Archaeology and Conservation section needs to be corrected. A paragraph in the first section begins with "an portion" as opposed to "a portion."

Images and Media
The images are well-organized, well captioned, and well-formatted.