User:Lightning2019/sandbox

THIS IS A DRAFT, I AM NOT YET READY TO SUBMIT THIS.

Request Edit I am submitting the following proposed changes in accordance with the directions at Wikipedia's Contact Us page for the subjects of articles or their representatives in the event "an article about you or your organization is incomplete, inaccurate, or biased.." I have a COI as an employee of USF. I will try my best to apply to all Wikipedia policies including regarding conflict of interest. I have been advised and received assistance by User:BC1278 as a paid consultant. 1.   In lead, delete:  “She received $879,506 for the 2015-2016 academic year, ranking her as the 11th highest paid university president in the United States.”

Note: Not one of the most important points about the subject, as per WP: Lead. Move salary info to Career in chronological order. 2.   Change “Early Life and Career” to “Early Life” and create a new section for “Career.” Note: Best practice for BLP is for Early Life and Career to be separate sections, as illustrated by most GA and FA examples. 3.    In “Early Life and Career” section, delete: As her grandparents spoke Yiddish, as a child, she thought all old people spoke Yiddish and was surprised when she heard an older person speak English at a grocery store. Note: Not relevant to bio. Out of context of personal history. Probably intended as anti-Semitic reference.

4.   In “Early Life and Career” move and expand the following to the new “Career” section.

“After graduation, she worked at Ohio State University. She received tenure and full professor rank. She became Dean of Education at University at Albany. After a national search and recommended by the search committee, Hitchcock promoted her to Vice President of Academic Affairs."

New proposed text:

After joining the faculty of the Ohio State University in 1976 as an assistant professor in school psychology, she eventually received tenure and became the department chair. She was chairpersob of the University Senate and led the Department of Educational Services and Research. In 1992, she became dean of the school of Education at University at Albany, State University of New York. She later served as the Vice President of Academic Affairs. She became the provost at the University at Albany in 1997. Note: more precise and better sourced than current sentences about this stage of the subject’s career. 5.   In “Early Life and Career” move the following into “Career” section. Exact language and placement explained in Request Edit 14.

She also served as director of American Momentum Bank. She served as chair of the NCAA Board and the American Council on Education Board.[12]” 6.   In “Career” section, add a new sub-section for “University of South Florida” and delete “President at University of South Florida” as a full section. Note: this is the longest and most significant period of career so merits a sub-section, but still falls within “Career.” 7.   In new  “University of South Florida” section add the following as the first paragraph: Genshaft became the president of USF in July 2000. She said that one of her long-term goals was for USF to match the same academic and research standards as Florida’s flagship schools. Note: Establishes chronological order, the typically the best practice for BLP, as in GA and FAs. 8.   In new “Career” section, insert in chronological order: Genshaft named NFL Hall of Famer Lee Roy Selmon as USF's director of athletics in May 2001. Note: this is a critical position for a university and a high-profile hire covered by RS. 9. In new “Career” section, delete all sub-sub-section headings. Note: All these sub-sub section headings are being used to break the bio out of chronological order. The best practice for BLP “Career” is that it progress in chronological order. 10. Delete “Al-Arian controversy” sub-sub-section heading. Note: doesn’t merit a sub—sub section since “University of South Florida” already a sub-section that makes it seem like this is the most important event in the career of the subject. This is just one of many events in the BLP. NPOV. 11. In “University of South Florida” section about Sami Al-Arian, the following attempts to make the section briefer so it is not WP: Undue and stays within WP: NPOV. Currently reads like an article about the event, not a summary focused on Genshaft for a BLP. a.	Delete first sentence: Following the September 11 attacks, USF professor Sami Al-Arian was interviewed by Bill O'Reilly regarding his connections to Ramadan Shalah, leader of the Islamic Jihad Movement in Palestine. Note: Paragraph should start with Genshaft’s actions, not interview unrelated to Genshaft. b.	Delete second sentence as: In October 2001, Genshaft placed USF professor Sami Al-Arian on paid administrative leave and prohibited him from entering USF property as a result of campus safety concerns because of his connections to the Palestinian Islamic Jihad,, a U.S. designated terrorist group. Note: Condense event for brevity c.	Edit next sentences as: In 2001, Genshaft and the USF Board of Trustees voted 12-1 to put Sami Al-Arian, a former USF professor later convicted of supporting terrorism and sentenced to 57-months in prison, on paid leave and barred him from teaching at USF. The Faculty Senate and American Association of University Professors condemned Al-Arian’s suspension from teaching as infringing on academic freedom. In 2003, Genshaft and the board fired Al-Arian after he was arrested by the F.B.I. and accused of being the North American leader of U.S.-designated terrorism group Palestinian Islamic Jihad. Note: adds description of who Al Arian is; adds source for claim; deletes dead links, dead sources; edits for style and NPOV. Changes “assault on” to “infringing” to avoid hyperbole. Condenses detail so it’s suitable for BLP,  not an article about this event. d.	Delete: The Faculty Senate President Gregory Paveza condemned firing as underhanded because the professor did not have his side of the story heard. The faculty adviser to the Provost resigned in protest of the firing. United Faculty of Florida, the faculty union representing USF professors, voted to throw its full support behind Al-Arian and condemned the university for exaggerating security concerns until he was arrested by the FBI. Note: Note: these links are dead and the source unavailable online. Language is NPOV problem. Still able to convey faculty protest in previous sentences without adding this granular level of detail about the event itself. This is Genshaft BLP, not an article about the event. 12. Add new sentence, in chronological order: In 2002, Genshaft created an honors college for USF, which had previously only had an honors program. Note: This is a key event in Genshaft’s moving the school toward joining the ranks of the highest-rated Florida universities. 13. Add new sentence, in chronological order: Genshaft fired medical school dean Robert Daugherty in October 2003 after he allegedly violated university rules when he requested that his staff contribute to the campaign of state House Speaker Johnnie Byrd. Note: Another high-profile firing. 14. Add new sentence, in chronological order: During her tenure, she advocated for supporting business growth with academic research and to this end, she served as chairperson of the Tampa Bay Partnership and the Greater Tampa Chamber of Commerce. She also served as a director of American Momentum Bank. To help raise the university's national profile, Genshaft served as chairperson of the Division I NCAA Board of Directors and of the American Council on Education Board. 15. Add new sentence, in chronological order: The Chronicle of Higher Education reported that from 2000 to 2007, under Genshaft, USF grew federally-funded research 213 percent, at a faster rate than any university in the country 16. Add new sentence, in chronological order: In 2009, Genshaft announced a $600 million fundraising campaign called "Unstoppable." 17. Delete header for sub-sub-section “Presidential salary” and revise text (in chronological order: After 2015, her contract was renewed year-to-year rather than spanning five years. She received $879,506 for the 2015-2016 academic year, ranking her as the 11th highest paid university president in the United States. In March 2017, USF's Board of Trustees voted to provide her with a total compensation package $924,547, including a base salary of $505,837 with 37% of the total package tied to performance. Under Florida law, state funding for the president's salary is capped at $200,000. USF used private funding to make up the difference. Note: all this text is the same as current article, but moves salary information from lead to this paragraph. Deletes duplicate source for same info on ranking. A separate sub-sub section not needed for a routine aspect of her career. 18. Delete header sub-sub section “Relationship with student body”. Not significant enough to warrant a separate sub-header for section. Stylistic changes to text requested: In 2016, a student campaign organized by Students for a Democratic Society failed to persuade Genshaft to change the name of a building named after former U.S. Congressman Bill Young. The students said Young's actions in the Florida Legislative Investigation Committee in the 1960s were homophobic and he supported anti-LGBT policies until his death. Note: IDs Young as congressman. Attributes claims about Young to the protest group. 19. Delete header sub-sub section “Emerging preeminence” Not significant enough to warrant a separate sub-header for section. a.	Substitute this text so it’s directly about Genshaft and place it so it is chronological order -- after the paragraphs about 2017: In 2018, USF met Genshaft's goal, set at the time she became president of the university in 2000, to become a "preeminent" research university, by meeting 11 of the 12 metrics for "full preeminence standard" set by the Florida Board of Governors. Four-year USF graduation rate rates improved from 20% in the early 2000s to 60% in 2018. She also wrapped up the "Unstoppable" fundraising campaigns with $1 billion raised, early in 2018.<ref name=":2" / 20. Delete sub-sub-section header: “Adjunct Faculty Protests”: In 2017, adjunct faculty at USF protested Genshaft and the university for opposing efforts to unionize adjunct faculty. Note: this info is largely “Coatracking.” There were probably many protests on campus during the 19 years Genshaft was president. Extended version might belong in the article about USF. Alternative to shortening the paragraph is to delete it because of Coatracking. 21. Add new sentence, positioned in chronological order: Genshaft asked for the resignation of USF St. Petersburg regional chancellor Sophia Wisniewska because of her management during Hurricane Irma in 2017. Wisniewska implied in an email to Genshaft that that she was still in St. Petersburg, when she had actually left for Atlanta. Wisniewska resigned. Note: another noteworthy firing. 22. Add new sentence, in chronological order: In June 2019, Genshaft and her husband Steve Greenbaum donated $20 million to USF for the construction of a new honors college building. The honors college will be named after her. She announced an additional gift of $3 million that same month to endow a deanship for the honors college. 23. Add new sentence, in chronological order: Genshaft retired as president of USF in July 2019. After retiring as president, she was named president emerita.

24. Rename sub-section “Accolades” as “Recognition” and create a separate section for it, below new section “Recognition” The text below it can remain the same. Note: “Recognition” or “Honors” is more common on BLPs than Accolades. Recognition is not part of ‘Personal Life” or “Career” by logic or by BLP best practices, so should be its own section. 25. In “Personal Life”, delete: She serves on the board of directors of Fresh Mark, an Ohio-based meat producer that was started by Genshaft's father and is currently run by the Genshaft family. Her brother Neil Genshaft is currently the Chief Executive Officer of Fresh Mark. Note: First sentence supported only by an unreliable, UGC source, Glassdoor. That said, even the UGC source doesn’t say she’s on the board, it was started by her father, or that the family currently runs it. Second sentence, about brother is Coatracking. His professional career is not prominent enough to merit mention in her profile. 26. In “Personal Life: section, reword sentence as: She decided not to live in the on-campus president's residence at USF, the 9,000-square-foot Lifsey House. Instead, she lived in the Tampa Palms neighborhood near campus. Note: Stylistic. Also, corrects tense since this refers to her time as USF president, not current.

27. In “Infobox”

Change degree from University of Wisconsin to a B.A. Removed “BSW. ”The article says B.S. in Early Life. Change degree from Kent State to M.A., not an MeD. The second source in “Early Life” from the St. Petersburgh Times, has all her degrees listed properly. Unfortunately, it’s not online. I have a hard copy from the newspaper. Her University of South Florida bio says she has a Masters, not an MeD. https://www.usf.edu/system/about/past-presidents/judy-genshaft.aspx Website is now: https://www.usf.edu/system/about/past-presidents/judy-genshaft.aspx Please change from URL listed there now Thank very much. 15:32, 11 October 2019 (UTC)