User:LilIlyich/General Union of Palestinian Women/Abigmana Peer Review

General info
LilIlyich, Vmrtz, KevinSantosKS, and Goldenflowergarden
 * Whose work are you reviewing?
 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:LilIlyich/General Union of Palestinian Women
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):General Union of Palestinian Women

Lead

 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content by your peer? : The lead does have added substance from the changes, but only from the Goals/Mission portion. I would also add a little bit more of the origins and accomplishments since these were important changes as well.

Content

 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? : Yes, very much so. I would recommend expanding a little bit on how the Arab Women's Union was then pipelined/transformed into the General Union of Palestinian Women, perhaps organizing it by date to make the chronological connection a bit clearer.
 * Is the content added up to date? : Yes, it is up to date, though as an addition to the draft, I would provide some recent activism efforts in a later section to highlight current actions that we see, especially considering current events happening in 2023.

Tone and Balance

 * Is the content added neutral? : Yes, the content added is fairly neutral. A few sentences that could be seen as editorializing/adding a bit of opinion would be the following:
 * "Thirty years prior to the conception of the GUPW, organizations such as the Arab Women's Union actively organized women in Jerusalem by utilizing a flexible framework that integrated Palestinian nationalism with social and political action."
 * The opinion here would be injected in the "flexible framework" phrase, since it seems like the author is giving their praise for the framework.
 * Take this with a grain of salt, however, I think this only borders on editorializing and is acceptable given the nature of the word "flexible" haivng an example/explained immediately afterward
 * "As Palestinian identities continued to be redefined through the precarious status of the Palestinian state[...]"
 * Though may be true, a general rule of thumb is to avoid using negatively/positively connotated adjectives, or attribute it to an expert opinion as an alternative.

Sources and References

 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?: Yes, the information feels well-sourced, there are some reused sources throughout the page though that I would caution against over-reusing, maybe just include the same citation once or twice.

Organization

 * Is the content well-organized? : Yes I will say it is very clearly organized, a couple of suggestions I would have:
 * For the Notable people's section, include Intisar al-Wazir (Um Jihad) and Zulaykha al-Shihabi in the outline list prior as well
 * For the Accomplishments/Legacy section, consider separating by header the Establishment of Diasporic Branches from Hosting of 2022 Open Day on Women, Peace, and Security
 * I think both sections are clearly distinct enough for them to have separate sections

Images and Media
Peers did not add images or media.

Overall Impressions
Very impressed with the level of detail and research that the group was able to add to the existing article. The stub of the original article really did not have much information at all, and this feels much more true and fulfilling to read due to the increased amount of detail and information. I think the addition of Diasporic Branches was particularly strong and interesting, and would continue to keep adding as much as possible. Good Luck!