User:LilIlyich/General Union of Palestinian Women/Rainyfield637 Peer Review

General info
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:LilIlyich/General Union of Palestinian Women::Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):General Union of Palestinian Women

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead section has been updated to reflect new updates. Intro sentence is included. This section is lacking a rundown of the sections. All info in lead is present in article. Great job on the conciseness.

Content is relevant to topic and up to date. No missing content and equity gaps are met.

There is a consistent neutral tone with no biased claims. There no biased viewpoints regarding representation. There no no persuasion present and nice job on that front.

Content is backed up by secondary sources. Content accurately relfects sources when checking the content on each one in references. Sources are thorough and current. Diversity among authors is present. The sources there are quite strong with journal articles present. Lastly, all links work.

No spelling errors were detected and the content written was very concise and to the point. Broken down sections were effective and no bloated.

No images are included.

I believe that the content added to this existing article has improved it by going into increased detail on the issues surrounding teh General Union of Palestinean Women. Through the inclusion of goal, accomplishments, and origins; the important elements are front and center to the viewer to expand their knowledge. The added content is strong due to its conicsesness, attention to detail, and flow from one subject to the next. Areas of improvement include possibility adding more info on the goals and mission section. Overall, nice work so far.