User:LilMewsWorld/User:Lewis11coyote/Joseph Kossivi Ahiator/LilMewsWorld Peer Review

General info
Lewis11coyote
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Lewis11coyote/Joseph Kossivi Ahiator
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Joseph Kossivi Ahiator

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? Lead has not been included but can be added to the current information added. I would suggest breaking down the information in the biography to include a brief lead.
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic? The introduction is included in the biography.
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections? No information is included in the lead.
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article? N/A
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed? N/A

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? Yes, information on the artists reasoning for their artwork, as well as details about their education and artworks, is included.
 * Is the content added up-to-date? Yes, the content seems up-to-date in describing the artist's background and artworks.
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? Content that is missing would be the lead, one can be added with the information presented.
 * Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics? Yes, information on his artworks and education has been added that was not in the original post. We can have a better look at the artist with the new information presented.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral? Yes, the content added does not read as biased.
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? N/A
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? There is a focus on his works about the sea that could be expanded to other topics his works contain.
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another? No, there is no biased information.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? The sources added are mostly articles and journals, it looks like more research needs to be done to find reliable book sources.
 * Does the content accurately reflect what the cited sources say? (You'll need to refer to the sources to check this.) Yes, all information in the cited sources has been added to the article.
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic? The source list is small and could be researched more to included a longer source list and footprint for the artist.
 * Are the sources current? Sources are a bit older but that could be due to lack of information found.
 * Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible? Information derived from an article published by the University of Illinois is included as well as an article written by Professor of Art History, Henry John Drewal.
 * Are there better sources available, such as peer-reviewed articles in place of news coverage or random websites? (You may need to do some digging to answer this.) N/A
 * Check a few links. Do they work? No links are present, hyperlinks can be added to the sources. When copy and pasted into the search bar all sources can be found.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? The information is concise.
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? There are few grammatical errors that can be fixed to improve the flow of the article.
 * For example the sentence, "Due to this, many of his temple paintings can have the same figures or imagery, such as Dan Aida Wedo, the rainbow serpent vodu which can be seen as the link between India, Africa, and the seas in his artwork." can be reworded as " Due to this, many of his temple paintings can feature the same figures or imagery, such as Dan Aida Wedo, the rainbow serpent vodu. This artwork serves as a connection between India, Africa, and the seas."
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? Yes, the content added is well-organized.

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic? N/A
 * Are images well-captioned? N/A
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations? N/A
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way? N/A

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete? Yes the new information added provides a better background on the artist.
 * What are the strengths of the content added? The content provides the reader with information on the artist's work and the origins of his subjects.
 * How can the content added be improved? Secondary sources are needed if available. Grammar checks will also improve the article and presentation of new information.

Evaluate the drafted changes
The article was clear, well-written, and presented all information unbiasedly. However, it lacks hyperlinks and citations to the sources, which could easily be added to improve the reader's experience. The information presented added notability to the artist and proved basic details, such as education. A quick grammar check could help improve the flow of the article, making the information clearer for the reader. Overall, the article is well-written but can be improved with minor changes.