User:Lillybuns/Cell division/Kloft112 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Lillybuns


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Lillybuns/Cell_division?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Cell division

Evaluate the drafted changes
So far, I can tell that you've spent time with your article. One of the biggest things I would note to watch out for, is subjective language. I noticed during your opening sentence you said "Cell division in eukaryotes is much more complicated than in prokaryotes." Just by using the words "much more" offers subjective language which should be avoided when writing a wikipedia article. Try to not use comparative language that may convey that one thing is more difficult, complicated, or interesting than another.

Another thing I would note is that some of your sentences could be more straightforward and cohesive. Take this sentence for example "Depending on if the chromosomal number is reduced or not, eukaryotic cell divisions can be classified as mitosis (equational division) or meiosis (reductional division)." I think that this sentence may be a bit chaotic and requires a bit of dissecting before someone could fully understand it. A better way to have written this may have been " Eukaryotic cell division can occur through the use of mitosis or meiosis. The method of cell division depends on whether the number of chromosomes is reduced or not." Though it might add another sentence, it does help with easier understanding.

Generally, your edit is going down a good route. I don't have a comment on your sources since it's not a prevalent portion of your edit, but you are developing it nicely.