User:Lillyroehrig/John Francis (environmentalist)/Kpurple Peer Review

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Lilyroehrig
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 * User:Lillyroehrig/John Francis (environmentalist)
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 * John Francis (environmentalist)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead: The lead looks good, I think not adding or taking away any information was a good choice. You also included more information and expanded on what was introduced so great job with that!

Content: The plot summary addition was a great choice, the information is relevant, and detailed. However, I would suggest shortening each chapter section to maybe 1-2 paragraphs each. Maybe add only the most important details if possible. Specifically, for the second paragraph in your first chapter section, you can shorten it by possibly getting rid of the specific details pertaining to his silence since there is a “Silent Period” section.

Tone and Balance: All of your added content seems to be very neutral and non biased or persuasive!

Organization: Everything is very well written! However, as I mentioned before, try to use the most important information to include in the plot summary to help with precision. Also, double check spelling (the first to catch my eye was the way you spelled “Philadelphia”).

Overall Impression: The page seems closer to being completed with your add on, much needed.