User:Lilurkel44/We Real Cool: Black Men and Masculinity/KennyTharp Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Lilurkel44


 * Link to draft you're reviewing https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Lilurkel44/We_Real_Cool%3A_Black_Men_and_Masculinity?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * We Real Cool: Black Men and Masculinity

Evaluate the drafted changes
-Very to the point, seems to only be 3 sections, which could take some work

-There seems to be some grammar and formatting errors.

-The summary seems to be a word vomit, with little to no organization regarding the flow of the summary itself. I get lost very easily navigating the summary and I feel like some subheadings could do wonders for where and how to look.

-Reception seems to be very skinny, as this is a place that could take some heavy bulk work! I am sure there many avenues that you can traverse down to get different elements and perspectives from this work's reception and reputation

-In the "See Also", there is a link to Hegemonic masculinity. Instead of making it a "See Also" feature, you could take that term and immediately

-Being captain obvious, the top reads that the article "may rely excessively on sources too closely associated with the subject." It reads that this may hurt it's verifiability and neutrality, so that's something to look out for.