User:Lilurkel44/We Real Cool: Black Men and Masculinity/YSL123 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

- Lilurkel44


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * - We Real Cool: Black men and Masculenity
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * - We Real Cool: Black Men and Masculinity
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * - We Real Cool: Black Men and Masculinity

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

The lead does highlight the the article but the article only consists of the summery of the book. So for the lead to be improved more would have to be added to the article.

Content:

Even though the article is a summary of the book I think some sections could be added to help add more meaning to the article. Like a separate section about the effects that black mens masculinity plays when raising children and how that impacts them. It could create a cycle or break those stereotypes. That could be interesting to see.

Tone:

The Tone sounds informative and cohesive.

Sources:

There isn't very many sources and of the few that are there is missing information or empty items in the sources themselves.

organization:

Images/ Media

Once more sections are added pictures will be useful depending on the sections. The only picture there is the cover of the book.