User:Lily.Weissman/Cultural Zionism/Maya Millner Peer Review

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Lily.Weissman
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 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Cultural Zionism

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

The lead sentence is pretty good and does introduce the topic pretty well. One thing from the original article that I would have liked to see change is the mention of political zionism in the first sentence. While I do think it is very relevant to the topic and adds an important contrast/context for cultural zionism, I do not think it should be in the very first sentence of the article. Overall I think the lead is very good! It is nice and concise and does a good job setting up the next section.

Content:

The content feels very relevant and some much needed background info on the historical context was added. I can't say there was anything that came to mind that I felt like was missing from this article and nothing seemed out of place while I was reading it either. I think the content and equity gaps have been filled fairly well here.

Tone and balance:

The tone of this article is very neutral and I did not detect any bias. I would have liked to maybe see a little more information on what the cultural zionist ideology's ideal situation in Palestine would be in terms of Jewish/Arab relations but it was touched on in an unbiased way.

Sources:

Some of the sources do go back pretty far but for this type of article I do think that it makes sense to draw from sources from the time period.

Images and Media:

N/A

Organization:

I liked the addition of the new sections! I think the article is split up nicely now and flows really well.

Overall impressions:

Great job! So much good information was added and some necessary backgroud/clarifications were made. The non-biased writing was very well executed and I think this article has been improved greatly. The only thing I would say to add if you can find it, is again more information on the outlook of Cultural zionism on the Arab/Jewish relationship. Great job!