User:Lily.sophia.kate/Campamento (Chile)/Sancar27 Peer Review

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The leads and the choices behind adding these sections makes sense and are relevant to the overall topic. The tone is mostly neutral, but does seem like it has a bias in favor of workers forced into living in campamentos. The writing seems like it could belong in an argumentative essay and so scaling back or discussing the benefits campamentos bring towards population control, commute times and things of that nature can keep the text more neutral. and the topic of campamentos is notable and worth up to date research as the sources the editor brought to the table. The sources and references are well selected. However, instead of citing Enzo Faletto directly, it is probably best to just describe his idea and then cite him as done with other sources because the average person will not know the significance behind why that person is brought up. Overall the inclusions to the article are easy to follow and digest, it is well organized and meshes well with the original article. No noticeable grammar issues. This was a good inclusion to the topic that readers will benefit from.