User:Lilybillow/Mandala/Faith.amaris Peer Review

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Lily Billow


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First, I do like where this article is going, I did look at the original wikipedia Mandala page and I believe my colleague is adding a good chunk of information for mandalas. Additionally the references that you used were simple and good, the two references from YouTube were solid. The only difference suggestion that I would give is to make this information about sand mandalas more "meaty" per say. I would like to see references beside the strong YouTube ones. For instance are sand mandalas used for religious purposes, is there an origin of the creation of sand mandalas? Is the use of sand mandalas relevant specifically to Buddhism? Additionally as an art therapy major tactile such as sand are used for clients to ease them, could this information be included in the creation of sand mandalas? With that in mind if you intend to research this ask questions such as has sand mandalas been used in the psychology world? Is there any research that could prove this?

This article is bluntly neutral, there are no stances are biases, which is good. It just has straightforward information about the content. The structure is pretty clear and simple to follow. It is off to a great start! Again, the sources are reliable, there just needs to be more. The lead also has a good solid start as well, I do not have critique for that. Just follow through with the lead you have and continue to add strong information. And continue with this clear structure. Overall I think you are on the right track with this simple strong information, just follow through with more information, references and ask yourself the questions I suggested for more strength.