User:Limeturtle11/Group A streptococcal infection/Hannahzmuzinski Peer Review

General info

 * Limeturtle11
 * User:Limeturtle11/sandbox

Content
The content added included an Epidemiology section and Treatment section. The Epidemiology section is relevant to the topic because it offers a historical foundation to the prevalence and incidence of Group A streptococcal infection. The author also did a good job at moving through various time periods as to show the outcome of GAS over the years. The Treatment section is also relevant, pertaining to various medications and treatments that could apply, as well as any risk factors or side effects that have been reported. The information is up-to-date as assumed by the selected citations. In the Epidemiology section there is a sentence that states, " A positive test result for the presence of group A streptococci was found in 32.1 percent of individuals after throat cultures were executed in a 20 year long (1953/1954-1973/1974) study performed in Nashville, TN." I am not sure whether this is pertaining to the information prior to this sentence or if it is a new piece of information, nor what it means for throat cultures to be executed. This is the only piece of content that I believe does not belong, however the rest is really well thought out and written.

Tone and Balance
The content added is written in a neutral tone and there are no biases towards a particular position. The information is purely factual based and are explicitly cited. The author makes no attempt to persuade the reader towards one position or another. Overall, the the author did a good job at keeping the tone and balance unbiased as to strictly provide useful information helpful to the reader.

Sources and References
All of the new content is backed up by a reliable scholarly source of information and are thorough. The citations also reflect extensive knowledge on the topic. One source, however, is not very current, "Streptococcal Infections" written in 1982. However this is still a relevant citation that provides useful information as to the topic of interest. The other sources are recent, written within the last few years. All of the links also work and lead to reputable cites.

Organization
The content added is well-written, however it is choppy in some places. The content needs a few more transitions in some places so that the information flows better especially between sources. The first sentence, "Cases of GAS were evident before this in both World War I and World War II", is a little hard to understand, as they are referring to cases being evident in the present and the past. The content has no spelling errors, however there are some sentence fragment errors, for example "The health care system is often encumbered, since 91 percent of patients infected with invasive GAS need to be hospitalized...". The sentence is slightly unclear and may result in confusion for readers. The content is well-organized and clearly divided into sections that reflect the main points of interest. The information beneath each heading clearly represents the main idea of each section.

Overall impressions
The content added has improved the overall quality of the article by including two new sections that consist of useful and relevant information for the reader. The sections added are crucial to the understanding of GAS, thus making the article more complete overall. The strengths include providing reliable and valid citations, which infers that the content is based off of factual evidence rather than opinion. Another strength is the amount of information the author added. There was a lot of information gathered pertaining to the Epidemiology section which is helpful, as well as many treatments and information associated with treatments that could be helpful to readers. The content can be improved by making minor changes to sentence and grammatical structure, besides that the whole this is really well-formulated and executed.