User:Lindsey Herzog/sandbox

The Motherhood Penalty article includes many topics that may take away attention from the main issue at focus. Many policies included clouds the overall definition or idea of this subject. The article also talked about this issue occurring around the world but does not give examples of where the specific policies stem from. This leaves confusion in where the facts and statistics are coming from, only the United States or other countries as well. The author did do a good job of accurately citing sources but many of these sources could be deemed as unnecessary to this specific article when the topic is narrowed in. This article could explain the definition of what the motherhood penalty is before diving into the background of policies or theories. It should use theories to back up the ideas presented rather than including them in a separate sub point. Another viewpoint that was brought up in the talk page that would be helpful to include would be if there is a parental penalty that applies to fathers also. This was brought up slightly in the motherhood vs. fatherhood section but would be helpful to intertwine into other ideas throughout the article. Overall, the ideas should be sorted through to shorten the article into the important points and then back those points up with evidence and theories. Lindsey Herzog (talk) 16:44, 13 February 2018 (UTC)