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In the essay "the Moral Basis of Capitalism" by Robert W. Traciniski there were many good points expressed, but the way they were presented may repel students of today. there are many reasons for this, the first the topic is rather uninteresting to many, the vocabulary is used in a complex manner, and the essay could have related examples to the reader.

First of all the topic is quite uninteresting for the majority of today`s youth. The idea of studying Capitalism and most other economic ideas are about as fun as watching your dog die, in other words it`s not. It may appear to be unorthodox but if you must present the material, an attempt to print it in a way that grabs the attention of todays youth would not go unrecognized. For example if it was made in to a short film, where his points were proven by showing the effect of the opposite. If the following quote was placed in a visual situation many more people would be more like to be inspired to do something. "what no one has grasped yet. . . the sanctity of the individual."

Next, the vocabulary that is used is arranged in a complex matter. take this sentence for example. "Every product that sustains and improves human life is made possible is made by the thinking of the worlds creators and producers." would it not be much more simple to say " everything that improves life is made by people that think" this is basically the same phrase just worded differently. Simplifying the text will not only make it easier to read but more appealing. The natural course of action is always the path of least resistance. so people would rather read a article that is short, sweet and hits all the points, opposed to some over glorified piece of garbage.

Finally if there were examples placed in the article that could show how it relates to the desired audience many more people would understand the importance of the issue Traciniski is trying to bring up. If he could find some way to relate this to food almost every one would be able to grasp his basic thesis. Every one eats, therefore every one should be able to relate to his ideas. Here Tracinisi says " What no one has grasped yet is that capitalism is not just practical but it is also moral." then he could have made the analogy that putting milk in your cereal is not just a good idea it is the right idea.

So Traciniski has marvelous ideas, but if he wants to address the public of today he may consider  evoking an alternate form of  sharing his ideas, possibly with an alternate form of media, relating the issue to more common ideas, and reducing the text to only what is necessary to achieve his goal.