User:Lior Nesher/sandbox

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"The Jerusalem Beer Festival is one of the largest beer festivals in Israel, held annually in the summer since 2004. Other festivals are held in Tel Aviv, Haifa and the Mateh Yehuda region. A wine and beer festival is held annually in Beer Sheva. The city of Ashdod held its first beer festival in 2011."

-My Improvement will be related to the sentence below. I will provide more information about the Jerusalem Beer Festival.
"The Jerusalem Beer Festival is one of the largest beer festivals in Israel, held annually in the summer since 2004"

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The Jerusalem Beer Festival is one of the largest beer festivals in Israel, held annually in the summer since 2004. Over the years, the Jerusalem Beer Festival has become an icon of Jerusalem's pastime culture and an important and famous part of the city’s tradition. The festival is held for two days usually between August 28-29. Every summer, over 15,000 people visit the festival and apart from the 120 different types of beers there are also performances by Israelis leading artists. The entry requirement is that you must be at least 18 years of age and the entry prices are NIS 40 (11$) on early sale or NIS 70 (19$) on the day of the event.

https://www.itraveljerusalem.com/he/evt/jerusalem-beer-festival/

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Most large beverage manufacturers sell similar products, though most of them only in Germany, Austria and Switzerland. Examples are Schwip Schwap by PepsiCo or Mezzo Mix by the Coca-Cola Company though most grocery store chains sell generic brand versions of the drink as well, usually called "Cola-Mix".

My improvement
-Many Germans prefer "Cola-Mix" over the original Spezi (FACT)

- add the most known and favorite version ( according the Germans )

-prices

My Draft
Most large beverage manufacturers sell similar products, though most of them only in Germany, Austria and Switzerland. Examples are Schwip Schwap by PepsiCo or Mezzo Mix by the Coca-Cola Company though most grocery store chains sell generic brand versions of the drink as well, usually called "Cola-Mix". Many Germans prefer "Cola-Mix" over the original Spezi. The most popular "Cola-Mix" drinks are Bernadett Amigo, Pali,Wita, Frucade, FZ,Leikeim, Hubauer, Eizbach, and Peboni. The price range per half liter glass bottle is 1 € to 1.75 € depends on the version.

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Hummus salad (Arabic: سلطة حمص‎) is an Arab salad. It typically consists of dry chickpea, soda carbonate, lemon juice, garlic, tahini, salt, olive oil, and cumin. Is one of the popular salads known in the Arab world.

My improvement
- other versions+ ingredients

- vegans benefits

MY DRAFT

Hummus salad (Arabic: سلطة حمص‎) is an Arab salad. It typically consists of dry chickpea, soda carbonate, lemon juice, garlic, tahini, salt, olive oil, and cumin. Is one of the popular salads known in the Arab world. There are many different versions of the Hummus Salad which contain additional ingredients such as: coriander,sweet paprika, turmeric,pepper, chopped mint, chopped onions, and parsley. Because of all the ingredients the Hummus salad is considered very nutritious and healthy. Many vegans around the world favor this dish because according to its nutritional benefits it serves as a good replacement for their dietary restrictions.