User:LisaA1X/Huangtingting/Clerie Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? (provide username)
 * LisaA1X
 * Link to draft you're reviewing:
 * User:LisaA1X/sandbox

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
 * Most of this information would not update the lead, but I think you should include the information about her dismissal from SNH48, both in the article and in the lead section as well.
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
 * Yes, the lead looks pretty good. Again, just include the information about her leaving SNH48.
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
 * No
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * No
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?
 * Concise and clear.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * All the content added is relevant to this idol.
 * Is the content added up-to-date?
 * All the content is up to date.
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?
 * Again, I think you should include details about her dismissal from the group SNH48, as well as any career she may have had since.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?
 * Yes, The content is neutral, stating only facts.
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * No, I didn't find any bias.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * No, I think the viewpoints presented were just statement of fact, no over representation, but I do think more information about her leaving the group and her career after SNH48 would be helpful.
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?
 * No, The content was written with the intention to persuade, only inform the reader.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * Most of the content has good citations, there are a few areas that need further work. I don't think that you can cite the SNH48 official website, because it is not independent or neutral.
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * From what I could tell, the sources seem to accurate (they are in Chinese, so I could only read it in google translate).
 * Are the sources current?
 * From what I could tell, the sources seem to up to date (they are in Chinese, so I could only read it in google translate).
 * Check a few links. Do they work?
 * all the links worked, but this one: https://www.sohu.com/a/230687793_115487 only brought up some pictures. Did you mean to cite a news article instead?

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * There were some great details. I wrote in LisaA1X talk space some ideas for how to re-word some of the sentences, to help them flow more naturally.
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * The grammar and spelling were quite good over-all.
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?
 * It will be easier to understand the organization once it is mixed in with the main article already written in Wikipedia. However, the sandbox draft I read was organized in a clear chronological order.

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
 * Does Not Apply
 * Are images well-captioned?
 * Does Not Apply
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
 * Does Not Apply
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?
 * Does Not Apply

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
 * Yes, this article is stronger, and more complete because of LisaA1X's efforts.
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * The specific videos Huang Tingting was a part of, her first center performance, and the information about servers crashing because of so many people voting at once were especially interesting to me. She sounds like a talented woman.
 * How can the content added be improved?
 * As I noted above, including information about her dismissal from the group, and her career after would be helpful. Also, finding sources to cite that are not from the SNH48 website would be good, since they are site devoted to this group, the information may not be unbiased. Also, consider some of the re-wording/edits I sent to your talk page.

Overall evaluation

 * I think that you are off to a great start. Great job, and keep up the good work!