User:LisaTruong3/Biodiversity loss/StolteKate Peer Review

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LisaTruong3


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 * User:LisaTruong3/Biodiversity loss
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 * Biodiversity loss

Biodiversity Loss Peer Review:
Overall, I was impressed by seeing your organization when I read your article!

Clarity:

I was impressed with your clarity throughout your article draft and I was able to understand the information you provided. For example, you mentioned “With the alteration in ecosystem functionality (due to homogenization of biota communities)…” and the additional information you provided in parentheses gave further support in your statement.

Structure:

I liked the information you added in your Pollution section and it was a great idea to split it into subsections of Air pollution and Noise pollution!

Grammar and Spelling:

Your second paragraph in Invasive species has a sentence starting with “because”, I recommend either removing this from the sentence or substituting with another transitioning word. I didn’t notice any mistakes in spelling except for an “s” missing in remains in your first paragraph of Air pollution.

Coverage:

You created an overall good coverage balance throughout your paper. I recommend focussing on expanding your subsection Air pollution to match the amount of information you provided for Noise pollution.

Neutrality:

Your writing remained neutral throughout the article. For example, you stated a prediction for biodiversity in high-risk fields but followed this comment with “However, this prediction does not apply to Western Asia, Asia-Pacific, Africa, South America, and the Caribbean, where fossil fuel and coal exploitation is expected to occur in areas with high species richness.” This was a great way to remain neutral!

Talk Page:

There is a photograph of The Forest Landscape Integrity Index in the original article which could be updated. There is no published date on the picture but a suggestion in your Talk Page could be if this reflects todays Forest Landscape as it is constantly changing.

Citations:

I checked your sources, and they seem reliable and are up to date. A citation I would suggest would help you add some more information to your Earthworm loss. I found a citation that may be beneficial in writing about climate change impacting earthworm biodiversity loss!

Citation: Singh, J., et al. (2019). Climate change effects on earths – a review. Soil Org. 91(3): 114-138. doi:10.25674/so91iss3pp114 ( https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC6944501/pdf/EMS85301.pdf )

Strengths and Weaknesses:

The strengths in your article were that your writing was cohesive and added useful information to the original article. Your separation of subsections like Air pollution/Noise pollution and Invasive species/Overexploitation helped me understand the topic and can help other readers navigate the article. You also gave great statistics of species abundance to support your topic.

A weakness I noticed in your article draft was some of your sentences were lengthy such as in Invasive species “Some invasive species, including muskrat, raccoon dog, thrips, and Chinese mitten crab are known to have high dispersal rates, having major implications on a regional scale; affecting 20-50 regions in Europe.” This sentence could be broken into two to provide a smoother reading experience to help the readers understanding.

Overall, I really enjoyed reading your article! StolteKate (talk) 00:35, 5 March 2021 (UTC)