User:Livlock/Feminism in South Africa/Lokkenva0117 Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? (provide username)
 * Livlock
 * Link to draft you're reviewing:
 * User:Livlock/sandbox

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
 * No
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
 * No
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
 * No
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * No
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?
 * There is no lead section

Lead evaluation
There is no lead section

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * Yes
 * Is the content added up-to-date?
 * Yes
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?
 * No

Content evaluation
The content relates to and is important to the article. It adds much more detail about the Marital Rape law that is only briefly mentioned in the original article. It makes good use of the primary source on the law itself and the incorporation of it in the article would help this section out greatly.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?
 * Yes
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * No
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * No
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?
 * No

Tone and balance evaluation
Good tone and neutral balance. The information is objective and doesn't take a stance on the topic.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * Yes
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * Yes
 * Are the sources current?
 * Yes
 * Check a few links. Do they work?
 * Yes

Sources and references evaluation
Sources are good and important to the addition to the Marital Rape heading. The use of the primary source is paramount in explaining the legislation itself. I see this is a work in progress and still needs proper references in the actual Wikipedia article.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * Yes
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * No
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?
 * Yes

Organization evaluation
The information is in its correct order however the it needs the incorporation of the information into the original article.

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
 * N/A
 * Are images well-captioned?
 * N/A
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
 * N/A
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?
 * N/A

Images and media evaluation
N/A

For New Articles Only
If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.


 * Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
 * N/A
 * How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
 * N/A
 * Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
 * N/A
 * Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?
 * N/A

New Article Evaluation
N/A

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
 * Yes the article will be more complete with this added information. It adds valuable context to what Marital Rape was and how it was banned in South Africa.
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * It adds information lacking on the original article.
 * How can the content added be improved?
 * It can be formatted onto the original article in the sandbox. The new information requires proper citations, including new references in the Reference section.

Overall evaluation
This is a good start to your wiki page contribution. The information is pertinent and adds valuable important information that is glossed over in the original article. The use of good secondary and primary sources such as the bill itself is a key important part of your contribution. Upon reading through the original article there looks like there could be a lot of potential in adding to the article Feminism in South Africa. Certain points that are under addressed throughout the article is the oppression of black South African women throughout apartheid. The article acknowledges they were oppressed more than white South African women but fails to go into detail of the forms of oppression they faced in day-to-day life and how they fought it. Also the sub heading Persecution of Activists have very little information on them. Under Persecution of Activists there is very little information present on who was arrested for what crime exactly. There isn't even an exact date for when the arrests happened. There is also no heading for challenges that feminists face in the current South African society. Lastly, formatting your work into the original article and adding the correct citations should be added.