User:Lkd36/Alclear/KellyJoB445 Peer Review

Peer review

 * First, what does the article do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? Any turn of phrase that describes the subject in a clear way? Be as specific as you can!
 * One part of the article that I really appreciated as an addition was the section on biometrics. Not only did the existing section on it lack explanation of what the biometrics within the company look like, but it also did not have a lot of information on how it was being used by the company or the opposition to it. Adding this information to the article gives the article a more rounded and objective perspective, as well as gives more useful information to the reader outside of what can be found on AlClear’s website. The article, in general, also adds a lot more context and information about AlClear as opposed to what is already posted on their website, helping to give it a more objective view overall.
 * I also appreciate how much the page has expanded. I know that it can be extremely challenging to find objective information about elite companies like this, but the group pulled from many different sources and is getting closer to having a full picture of what AlClear is on Wikipedia. Even with the addition of how many stations are at each airport and stadium, it gives more context into how large AlClear’s technology and impact are. It seems like this addition will add a lot of details that can clear up the bigger picture of what such a secretive company does


 * What changes would you suggest the author apply to the article? Why would those changes be an improvement? Be as clear as you can *where* these changes should be made: to the lead section, structure, coverage, illustrations, neutrality, or sources.
 * One thing I would recommend would be to read through the patent of AlClear and read about how it works. There’s a lot of shady information (in particular about how they confirm at least one third party authentication service has to confirm each facial recognition) that would definitely help to round out the controversy section of this article, even if the articles used to explain the controversy aren’t AlClear specific.
 * Also, I would possibly add in a section about how they’re spreading out from just ID services like stadiums and airports, but also small business recognition under the “Clear Affiliate” section. Even though there is not a lot of information on the website, it could lay the groundwork to show how the company is branching out past large companies and partners and working with smaller businesses and the average person.
 * I also think the group should start to add more illustrations. I know it can be difficult, but I think using some of the maps on the Clear website directly or even an infograph on how quickly facial recognition has spread before Clear started creating technology to do so would be a great addition.
 * What's the most important thing the author could do to improve the article?
 * What's the most important thing the author could do the improve the article?
 * The most important thing that I think this article could use to improve is more outside information on the company. As I said earlier, I know it can be difficult because the company is private, but looking through their fine print and their patents can expose a lot of information that is not discussed yet. Also, it might be applicable to include information not specifically about AlClear, but it could be applicable to find academic articles or other sources about some of the things that discuss what AlClear is doing and how it’s controversial.
 * Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article? Let them know!
 * This article inspired me to try to find different ways to find the information needed for my article. We both have topics that can be hard to find information on, but this group pulled together excellent sources and really added more to their article, which I hope to emulate when working on my article.