User:Lkshephe/Military psychology/Lizmtay Peer Review

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Lkshephe
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I noticed your citations aren't peer reviewed or secondary literatures so one feedback comment I want to make is to make sure you add some of those! I believe you have to have 2 so just keep that in mind as you keep changing your article. Also, make sure they're secondary! A problem I ran into was using primary instead of secondary. Wiki prefers secondary articles because they are used in more than one study and are more reliable than primary articles.

I recommend removing "Once obtaining a high school diploma or an equivalent, a bachelor's degree focused in the area of psychology is recommended. After getting a bachelors, graduate school is the next step. To become a psychologist, an individual must have a graduate degree, either a Masters or Doctorate, with education taking anywhere from 2 years and 2 to 4 years, respectively." I feel as if it may be excessive and if someone needs or wants to know the steps of getting the doctorate, that can be find elsewhere online. If you do want to keep these sentences, I would either make them into one short statement or revise them to feel less redudant.