User:Lkshephe/Military psychology/Sara8887 Peer Review

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Lkshepe
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I think you did a great job of including updated articles!

I feel like this sentence can be shorten and rephrased '''To become a military psychologist, a doctorate is necessary. Once obtaining a high school diploma or an equivalent, a bachelor's degree focused in the area of psychology is recommended. After getting a bachelors, graduate school is the next step. To become a psychologist, an individual must have a graduate degree, either a Masters or Doctorate, with education taking anywhere from 2 years and 2 to 4 years, respectively.'''

I would not include the high school diploma but I do think that the portion of the sentence that includes focusing in psych during your bachelors is good to keep. At the beginning of the sentence you stated a doctorate is necessary but then said to become a psychologist a masters or doctorate is necessary. I feel like as a reader it becomes confusing because if I was not following closely I would think that you were contradicting what you said earlier about military psychology.