User:Lll84/Mass media and American politics/Matthiggins10 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Lll84


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Lll84/Mass_media_and_American_politics?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Mass media and American politics

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead

- The lead does a good job of providing background information to add context for immediacy and soft media. The next two paragraphs do provide definitions of what they are. The information in the lead is new to the article and relevant. The five sentences was small enough to be concise but also big enough to have a detailed explanation.

Content

- The content is relevant to the topic but not outstanding enough to be it's own entire section. I think it would fit more as a segment in the New Media era section. The content is definitely up to date with many sources being in the past decade. I think content that could potentially added would be examples of how immediacy works and examples of soft news.

Tone and Balance

- There is plenty of balance in the content. It does not go into certain positions and just explains that the public was unhappy overall with the handling of political new by mass media.

Sources and References

- There are more than enough sources used and they are all peer reviewed academic sources. The content is clearly written in the writers own words after reviewing a couple of the sources online. The sources a fairly current for the most part.

Organization

- The content is well written overall but had a few obvious grammatical and spelling errors. The content does have good organization with an introductory paragraph and a paragraph for each of the topics presented.

Images and Media

- There are no images or media and I think it would be helpful especially with providing examples of soft news.

Overall Impressions

- The content makes the article better by providing ways the modern media affects American politics. The original article does not have much content on this topic so these examples are needed to add more information. I think that the paragraphs need to be proofread for grammatical errors because there are quite a few. I think ways the content could be improved would be providing examples of immediacy and soft news to give the reader a more clear picture to think of.