User:Lmc99/Moonlight Basin/Jeffdnguyen921 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Lmc99


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Lmc99/sandbox/Moonlight Basin Current


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Moonlight Basin

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead
Great job on the lead shrinking it down and only providing necessary information. I really like how short and how concise it is, it leads well into the rest of the article. One suggestion for the lead would be to introduce some of the next sections you will be talking about.

Content
The content added really did highlight relevant information and helped organize everything very uniquely and made it much more readible relative to the original draft. I am not familiar with the topic itself but I think having information revolving geography would be interesting.

Tone
Everything was very content neutral and helped present the facts in a very accordingly. Overall I think you do a great job at telling the history without much bias.

Sources and References
In terms of the references, many of the articles came from news articles and those are good for this project. Overall, the references are well chosen and I feel have merits in the article as a whole. Overall the additional information sources help add more information to the given article. Obviously some sources would be better but I think with the topic it would be harder to find better sources unless there was a scholarly article on the topic.

Organization
Great job reorganizing the article and making it more visually appealing with the helpful headers. Overall you did a great job in making the article much better looking for the audience and helping the reader so much.

Images
I think that more images revolving the area would be an interesting addition in the future which would help make the article better and bring out certain points brought up in the new editions of the articles.

Final notes
I think the article is so much better than the original one. I think a little more information regarding the geography and other unique facts on the site would be interesting. Obviously including more images would help the most and overall would make the article so much better.