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Under the Sea Wind: A Naturalist's Picture of Ocean Life (1941) is the first book written by the American marine biologist Rachel Carson. Under the Sea Wind was based on the article Undersea previously written by Carson and was published in the Atlantic Monthly in 1937. It was published by Simon & Schuster in 1941, when it received very good reviews but sold poorly. After the great success of a sequel The Sea Around Us (Oxford, 1951), it was reissued by Oxford University Press; that edition was an alternate Book-of-the-Month Club selection and became another bestseller, and never gone out of print. It is recognized today as one of the "definitive works of American nature writing," and is in print as one of the Penguin Nature Classics.

Description
Under the Sea Wind describes the behaviour of fish and seabirds accurately, but in story form, often using the scientific names of species as character names. Carson's stated goal in doing so was "to make the sea and its life as vivid a reality for those who may read the book as it has become for me during the past decade." The first of her characters is introduced this way:"With the dusk a strange bird came to the island from its nesting grounds on the outer banks. Its wings were pure black, and from tip to tip their spread was more than the length of a man's arm. It flew steadily and without haste across the sound, its progress as measured and as meaningful as that of the shadows which little by little were dulling the bright water path.  The bird was called Rynchops, the black skimmer."The middle section of the book follows the life-story of Scomber, the mackerel, while the last part describes pond creatures such as eels and ducks. A glossary at the end of the book provides additional detail.

Under the Sea Wind describes the behavior of fish and seabirds accurately, but in story form, often using the scientific names of species as character names. Carson's stated goal in doing so was "to make the sea and its life as vivid a reality for those who may read the book as it has become for me during the past decade." The first of her characters is introduced this way:"With the dusk a strange bird came to the island from its nesting grounds on the outer banks. Its wings were pure black, and from tip to tip their spread was more than the length of a man's arm. It flew steadily and without haste across the sound, its progress as measured and as meaningful as that of the shadows which little by little were dulling the bright water path.  The bird was called Rynchops, the black skimmer."The middle section of the book follows the life-story of Scomber, the mackerel, while the last part describes pond creatures such as eels and ducks. A glossary at the end of the book provides additional detail.

Assessment
The style of Carson's writing makes the book suitable for children as well as adults, and the appeal is enhanced with illustrations, originally by Howard Frech, and replaced in 1991 with illustrations by Robert W. Hines. Carson acknowledged the influence of nature-novelist Henry Williamson on her writing style, but uses her scientific expertise to ground Under the Sea Wind in scientifically accurate detail on each animal's appearance, diet and behaviour.

Introduction
Under the Sea Wind: A Naturalist's Picture of Ocean Life (1941) is the first book written by the American marine biologist Rachel Carson. Under the Sea Wind (or Under the Sea-Wind, or Under the Seawind) is the first of Carson's "Sea Trilogy", and first published in 1941 by Simon & Schuster. Carson's "Sea Trilogy" detail the sea from the shore to its depths, poetically focusing on specific personified animals. It is recognized today as one of the "definitive works of American nature writing," and is in print as one of the Penguin Nature Classics.

History
Under the Sea Wind initially received very good reviews, but sold poorly, potentially due to being overshadowed by the start of World War Two. After the great success of a sequel The Sea Around Us (Oxford, 1951), it was reissued by Oxford University Press; that edition was an alternate Book-of-the-Month Club selection and became another bestseller. Since republishing, Under the Sea Wind has been in print. Under the Sea Wind was popularized with the publication of the second book in the Sea Trilogy, The Sea Around Us, and it was this second text that truly established her as a natural history author. Carson took inspiration from natural history authors such as Henry Williamson and Henry Beston, and uses her scientific expertise to ground Under the Sea Wind in scientifically accurate detail on each animal's appearance, diet and behavior.

Description
- Under the Sea Wind describes the behavior of organisms that live both on and in the sea on the Atlantic coast. Under the Sea Wind consists of three parts, each following a different organism that interacts with the sea, and viewing it from the organism’s perspective. The first section, Edge of the Sea, follows a female sanderling Carson names Silverbar. The second section, The Gull’s Way,  follows a mackerel named Scomber, and the third section, River and Sea follows Anguilla, an eel. Carson had a poetic way of writing about nature, while still maintaining the scientific accuracy of her observations. The style that Carson presents Under the Sea is in stark contrast to her later work, Silent Spring, which is much more serious and analytical. This poetic prose allowed scientific observations to be brought to a larger audience, "turning the subject of the sea to a respectable reading matter for the clientele of the New Yorker and Readers' Digest sets, and inspiring a fashion in literature about the sea, its ways, and creatures." In the Penguin Classics publication, Under the Sea Wind was described Carson's personal favorite book she authored. Carson's biographer, Linda Lear, described in the preface of the Penguin Classics publication, how Carson's sense of wonder with the natural world led her toward her poetic writing style.

Critical Reception
- not sure if this section is necessary, I can only find one critical review.

Under the Sea Wind was received well,

Zvezda Draft 3/15:
Background: Undersea article published in the Atlantic monthly. Why her book didn't sell well:

--> World War II.

Importance: Connection of the scientific community to the average reader, not only does her writing style explain ecology but also gives examples and real life descriptions that a reader can understand. The book Under the Sea-Wind, raised environmental awareness along with the rest of her books

Additions to Background:

1.) Previous Writings and Contributions: - She wrote marine based radio scripts, these writings influenced her later publishing the article in the Atlantic Monthly. The article, Undersea, broadcasts themes of ecology and the unwavering will to survive that organisms in water embody[1]. 2.) Background on Influences: - After her article was published, Hendrik Van Loon became interested in her work. He encouraged her to continue this type of depiction in nature [2]. Rachel Carson furthered these messages from her article and expanded these perspectives in Under the Sea-Wind. These writing styles are also depicted in her later works. The bombing of Pearl Harbor occurred in 1941, America had been pulled into World War II the same year that Under the Sea-Wind was published [4],[5]. -Educational and Intentions with Publication of the book. --> More before WWII years.

3.)Additions to Description: The book Under the Sea-Wind, raised environmental awareness alongside with the rest of her books. Carson didn't only use scientific background to depict nature she also relied on visual observations.

Citations: 1.) Ferrara, Enzo. (2016). Undersea - Rachel Carson. 10.13135/2384-8677/1433. 2.) Lear, Linda J. Rachel Carson, Witness for Nature. New York: Henry Holt and Company, 1997. 3.) Lear, Linda. Homepage. RachelCarson.org. http://www.rachelcarson.org . 4.) Chambers, John Whiteclay II, ed. The Oxford Companion to American Military History. New York: Oxford University Press, 1999, 819-830. 5.) Lear, Linda. Under the Sea-Wind. RachelCarson.org. http://www.rachelcarson.org/UnderTheSeaWind.aspx

Zesgf4 (talk) 21:44, 17 March 2019 (UTC)

Add to an Article - 3/8
Look at the chapter of Feminist Ecocrisicism Environment, chapter 14. I want to elaborate more about the significance of the book, and the impact that it had upon publication.

Under the Sea Wind: A Naturalist's Picture of Ocean Life (1941) is the first book written by the American marine biologist Rachel Carson. It was published by Simon & Schuster in 1941, when it received very good reviews but sold poorly. After the great success of a sequel The Sea Around Us (Oxford, 1951), it was reissued by Oxford University Press; that edition was an alternate Book-of-the-Month Club selection and became another bestseller, and never gone out of print. It is recognized today as one of the "definitive works of American nature writing," and is in print as one of the Penguin Nature Classics.

Evaluating "Under the Sea Wind" wiki page
Why did you choose it? What's missing/ What do you want to add? Look up sources and put in sandbox.

We chose this article because it certainly has room to grow. We could add more information about the background and significance of the book, especially in terms of it being one of the first scientifically accurate biological texts. The publication could be improved upon, such as if there were any difficulties in the process, or the significance of a women publishing an ecological text. There could be more information on the content of the book; there is an odd section where one character is briefly mentioned, but I'm not sure why or the significance of that. The structure of the article could be changed, such as the "Assessment section" at the end of the article. There could also be more information about why she wrote the book, such as her personal life leading up to it. Why did she write so much about the sea? etc. I need to be careful though to not overlap with the territory of Rachel Carson's wiki page, as it is very well developed. I do think it would be worth it though to include information on the significance of her publishing this text at the time.

Possible sources:

http://data.isiscb.org/isis/citation/CBB001422329/ http://data.isiscb.org/isis/citation/CBB106244121/

http://hsns.ucpress.edu/content/47/3/349.full.pdf+html

Peer review by Karidappen (talk) 16:47, 22 March 2019 (UTC)
1. It has a very good introduction that clearly previews the topic and gives a general understanding of what Under the Sea Wind is. It also has a very clear description of what is included in the book. 2. I would suggest going back through and checking basic grammar and spelling because I noticed a couple errors. I also noticed a phrase in quotes with no citation so it may help to go back and figure out where it came from. I would also suggest adding an “about the author” section. You are telling us about this book and how it is so important and revolutionary, so giving the credentials of the author and why she is a credible source helps strengthen the argument that this book matters. 3. I would say the best thing to improve the article would be to talk about the author and then talk about the importance of the book in society. Tell us why this book matters to the world. You have done a great job describing the book and it’s contents but you can expand beyond that. 4. My article currently has a very weak introduction that covers a very narrow topic and doesn’t say much about what our topic truly is in itself and it’s influence. So seeing how your introduction was structured and how it was detailed and to the point gave me a better understanding of how I can improve my article’s introduction. Karidappen (talk) 16:47, 22 March 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review by Alan Zimmer (talk) 16:46, 22 March 2019 (UTC)
The sections wrote out flow nicely together, making for an easy read. The sections where kept short, sweet, and to the point. Something I would recommend would be to change the order of your sections so that the history comes after the description. As it stands, the readers are being told how it was important to history with only the introduction of what it is. Other than that, your article is well under way Alan Zimmer (talk) 16:46, 22 March 2019 (UTC)