User:Lmlambe3/Magical girl/Alanabrent Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Lmlambe3


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Lmlambe3/Magical girl


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Magical girl

Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall I think your contributions are very well written and important parts of the article. I think what you have labeled under your 'Controversy' section has good information, but doesn't seem controversial. Unless you are going to add more about certain controversies, then that could stay there, otherwise I think it more fits in the "Critical Analysis' portion. There is already a lot in the history section of the main article, so if you're going to add to that section make sure it is not repeated information. You could maybe add to the first couple sections of the history, as those are kind of sparse, if you want to of course. If you're still looking for more sections to add to in the article I would recommend the "Non Japanese Works" section. Under the Europe and United States section the article lists a bunch of shows, and I think you could definitely expand on each show. Maybe providing a short excerpt about each show in a bullet list form would help to just expand the article a bit more. I think you definitely have a great grasp of the article with what you have done so far, but there are still many holes in the main article that you could fill in and expand on.