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Amelia Edwards
Article: Amelia Edwards

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https://ia801404.us.archive.org/32/items/untroddenpeaksa00edwagoog/untroddenpeaksa00edwagoog.pdf

Novelist
Edwards' first full-length novel was My Brother's Wife (1855). Her early novels were well received, but it was Barbara's History (1864), a novel of bigamy, that solidly established her reputation as a novelist. She spent considerable time and effort on her books' settings and backgrounds, estimating that it took her about two years to complete the researching and writing of each. This painstaking work paid off when her last novel, Lord Brackenbury (1880), emerged as a runaway success that went to 15 editions. Edwards wrote several ghost stories, including the often anthologised "The Phantom Coach" (1864).

Dolomites
In 1872 Edwards took a trip through the Dolomites with her friend Lucy Renshawe. This journey was wrote about in her book Untrodden Peaks and Infrequent Valleys (1873). During this expedition Edwards also searched for the works of Titian, of which she found two paintings at a village church in Cadore.

Article Evaluation
Bead theory
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 * It doesn't discuss how this theory came about, which is something we talk about in class when bringing up a new topic

History

Thomas Hunt Morgan first proposed bead theory; genes were placed along a chromosome like beads on a string. Thought of this theory after studying white eyed and red eyed fruit flies.

https://www.nature.com/scitable/topicpage/Thomas-Hunt-Morgan-and-Sex-Linkage-452

https://www.nature.com/scitable/topicpage/thomas-hunt-morgan-the-fruit-fly-scientist-6579789

https://www.nature.com/scitable/topicpage/Thomas-Hunt-Morgan-Genetic-Recombination-and-Gene-496

https://pdfs.semanticscholar.org/a61a/4e1a2c28e517d6e4ca9a43fd63bbb65379e4.pdf

Further research pursued by Guido Pontecorvo

https://link-springer-com.libproxy.mst.edu/content/pdf/10.1007%2FBF02934463.pdf

Peer Review by jaszqd
Really good so far; it is definitely an interesting article. Just a few comments: A really great start with some unique information and additions. I'm excited to see how this article turns out! Your sources seem to be in pretty good order, a lot of them are from The Penguin Encyclopedia of Horror and the Supernatural. See if you can find any University presses to pull sources from. In many instances these are very useful and credible sources, but I can imagine that Amelia Edwards is hard to find sources for. Very good job so far! -jaszqd
 * I feel like the statement "She would accompany some of her writings with pictures she had painted. She would also paint about everything she read." could be rewritten to flow a bit better.
 * The statement "these sore throats" sounds a little awkward to me, I feel like there is a better way to word it, maybe "became plagued with sore throats that made it difficult to continue performing."
 * The draft is organized well! The structure makes sense and the information feels very relevant to the article. Initially, I was confused why her Early Life had so much information, but it seems like it is important to set the stage for her later life.
 * I feel like the section of the Dolomites could use expanding. It seems to be one of the most important aspects of her career and could use some more description.
 * The article coverage is neutral as far as I can tell, which is good.
 * Just a few grammar comments:
 * "This journey was wrote about" could be "This journey was discussed" or "This journey was written about"
 * Keep a close eye on how you're using adjectives and adverbs. They can make your writing start to seem biased in certain instances.  You mention "This painstaking work," but unless she explicitly said it in a diary or something, we can't be sure it was painstaking, just that it took two years, y'know?

Lmwvh8 (talk) 15:28, 23 March 2018 (UTC)
 * Those two statements can definitely combined into a single statement. Something along the lines of "She was known to paint about everything she read and sometimes incorporate those paintings into her writings."
 * I don't think the sore throats statement needs a total re-haul, but a simple fix like changing it to "The sore throats" might make it flow better.
 * The Dolomites section will definitely be expanded as it's a new section we just started working on.
 * Grammar
 * I see your point in how painstaking seems biased, but I think it needs to be changed as it just reiterates that she put considerable time and effort into her work. Although that statement could possibly be seen as biased in itself, so we'll have to discuss that some more.
 * As for sources we've got some more that we pulled from the UM system and even got a physical book, so we should be able to diversify our sources.