User:Logan Picunko/Sleep deprivation in higher education/00mkp Peer Review

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@Logan Picunko
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:Sleep deprivation in higher education - no sandbox present
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Sleep deprivation in higher education

Evaluate the drafted changes
Given the fact that a sandbox draft was not present, I worked from the article itself.

With these things being said, the article seems very complete content wise. All sources are properly cited and are extremely reliable, and pertain to the topic at hand perfectly. The topic is also a very relevant topic to our community, and being able to get some more information on this common issue has been a valuable insight.

The entire article is written in a very impartial and neutral way, with no bias being present. None of the claims appear to attempt to persuade the reader to do one thing or another, and with this topic, it would be very easy to fall into that trap. However, that does not happen here, and the article is extremely informative and allows the reader to draw their own conclusions.

The sources used are, as stated in the first paragraph, very reliable. They pertain directly to the topic at hand and are used in the proper manner, with direct quotations being cited directly and paraphrasing being linked to the references section at the bottom of the article. Further, the sources are written by a variety of different academic sources, providing views on different studies from different academic environments.

The content is definitely concise, but might be written a little too simply. In some places, the sentences seem a bit short and a little terse, and maybe rewriting some sentences to increase flow and readability of the text might have a positive impact on the writing. There is one capitalization error ("energy Drink"), but other than that the article is grammatically sound. Further, the content is also properly organized into its respective sections, with relevant titles being provided for each section. There is only one section that feels improperly named, and that is the one regarding the Circadian rhythm. The section talks more about how school times affect students than what the Circadian rhythm is, and I believe that a separate section could be written regarding the Circadian rhythm.