User:Logangarvin/Hōei eruption/JS4472 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Logangarvin)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Logangarvin/H%C5%8Dei_eruption?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/H%C5%8Dei_eruption

Evaluate the drafted changes
Your initial thoughts on the article is well written and descriptive in terms of what information it has and what missing. I like how you described some things you think the article should add such as number of deaths, affect of ash, etc. You guys do a good job at explaining what sources are credible along with key information you think should be added to the article. I would recommend you add a few more sections to extend your paper. You could talk more about the effects it had on the community's such as a decline in agriculture or how the floods effected them as well. Overall I like the work you have written but I believe adding more sections and information to your article will improve it drastically.