User:Logangarvin/Hōei eruption/Mcoope17 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Hōei eruption group


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Logangarvin/Hōei eruption


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Hōei eruption

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

There seems to be a lot of good information that you have started to add to your article. After reading the article, it seemed to be lacking a lot of details and did not have much information, so expanding on the broader concepts that the article covers is a good idea. Along with adding to the sections that are already in the article, you could add more headings with more information such as political or economic effects of the eruption, or the effects the explosion had on surrounding areas. Finally, you could add more relevant pictures or diagrams with captions because there aren't many visuals in the original article.

Dylan's Peer Review Response
I agree with much of what you said and I appreciate your peer review. I think it is important that we do consider the guiding questions as our article does feel a bit all over the place, so putting it in a better order using the guiding questions will be important. We definitely need to add more details and go more in depth in our article. I also agree there are many pictures and diagrams we need to add as well. I think your examples of headings we can use are also important and can be useful.