User:Lokio2021/Data Power/Loraaljbour Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Yasmin Bhullar


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Lokio2021/Data_Power?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User:Lokio2021/Data_Power/Loraaljbour_Peer_Review&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_peer_review&veaction=edit&redirect=no

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Feedback:


 * One thing I liked about the article are the examples you stated, the application of examples helped balance and support the discussion.
 * The article is balanced and there are well documented viewpoints. There are no phrases used that shed light on one topic more than the other which can be particularly challenging in a topic like this.
 * Both viewpoint of data activists and data actors were stated which creates a balanced  article.
 * Lead section is clear, concise, and easy to understand.
 * Main concern: While citation is shown in article, there a lot of statements attributed to one or two sources. This may lead to an unbalanced article.